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Parataxis

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Parataxis

Parataxis

I no longer keep a diary,
Repetitions  giving quintessence 
 to insights gained, from symbols in dreams, 
the fault in our stars, living and contriving, 
each plight by force of circumstance 
brings countermeasures,
provident planning, the difference it makes 
to declutter, the truth about multi-tasking, 

worldly themes continue, the mad pulse 
of someone's net loyalty, stopped.

The blue period between silent, pre-dawn light,
river descriptions,  your problem as a mountain,
how best to comprehend time, hold to silence 
an opulence of patience,  
this flower, this beauty, another nascence.

knowing all along, your niche is here, where you are.


 

Alliteration, 
Allusion, 
Asyndeton, 
Cadence.
Ceasura. 
Word Pairing, 

For Cyndi's Free Verse Challenge 
Written January 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Date: 3/1/2016 7:10:00 AM
this is one of my favourites amongst the commendations - it's beautifully written, with good cadence, a very natural tone - it was a tough contest, well done!
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 3/11/2016 7:46:00 PM
Dear Charlotte: I really appreciated your comment and feel bad that I took this long to respond. I am humbled when poets such as yourself, Cindy, Carrie, Craig, Ruben and simply Everyone who has singled out this poem for attention. Leaves me lost for the right words of thanks, Best, SuZ
Date: 2/26/2016 7:53:00 PM
Oh wow, Suzanne........I so do relate to this, ....the difference it makes to "declutter", a lesson I still need to hone! and knowing all along, where my niche is...haven't mastered that one as yet. (Living in the moment)! There is so much to gain from this poem !! Well done!!
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 3/11/2016 7:40:00 PM
Thanks Carrie for your valued comment. Ironic that since I wrote this we have decided to sell up and move. That is a lot of work But it doesn't let me off the hook for not responding sooner. Happy days, SuZ
Date: 2/25/2016 2:33:00 PM
I will chew on this one for a while, come back and reread. I am loving what Cyndi's challenge brought out of those poets she identified. I love "opulence of patience." A beautiful poem, Suzanne.
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Date: 3/11/2016 7:37:00 PM
Hi Faye: I am late with responding to your valued comment. As I wrote to Craig and Ruben, below my husband has been un- well and we have been getting our house ready to sell. I have also been writing and posting a few more poems for contests so haven't been addressing my comments as I should but I do thank you for taking the time. Hope you are well. Cheers, SuZ
Date: 2/25/2016 11:37:00 AM
Susanne. I closed and judged the contest this morning. Though you did not place, I have mentioned your poem on my blog... and I see this as beyond excellent. This is part of a poetry manuscript. YES? I can EASILY see 100-150 of these .... I'd buy the book, toots! Yuppers! Please, drop by the blog, if/when you can. I'm including a link now. I couldn't wait. I had to find out who wrote this. Others must read this. Hugs, Cyndi
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Date: 2/25/2016 8:05:00 PM
Hi Cyndi: What an incredible surprise. Thankyou so much for considering my entry...that is so encouraging. Off to see the winning poems. A real learning experience and a chance to stretch our poetic muscles. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 2/11/2016 3:30:00 PM
This poem went a little over my head (had to read it a couple times!). After doing so, however, I could enjoy it more. There like little trails of thoughts that undulate back and forth. It seems to me, you no longer keep a diary ... but are living in the moment. You're in a state of being and contentment ... knowing all along, your niche is here, where you are. Your last line says it all. Well executed! Though I'm unfamiliar with some of the literary tools, I do think alliteration is awesome :)
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Date: 1/25/2016 12:30:00 PM
This is amazing and lovely. Thank you for the incredible share.
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 1/25/2016 8:37:00 PM
Thanks Funom:)
Date: 1/12/2016 1:18:00 PM
I give you top marks for this poem, Suz, although I still have to go and read Cyndi's contest rules. ~ Hope the new year is smiling at you:) ~ Regards // paul
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 1/19/2016 11:26:00 AM
Thanks Paul: I couldn't sleep last night so got up to do another draft on this poem. I changed some words and moved some lines around and I think it flows a little better now. I looked at Cyndi's competition again and there were already 36 of the 40 poems allowed so I jumped in and entered it, even though I would need all year to properly understand all the literary terms, or if I had successfully used enough. We shall see.
Date: 12/30/2015 8:18:00 PM
this contest is RIGHT up your ALLEY but for me, in the dumpster. haha. I won't touch it with a ten foot pole. Anyway, yes, I remember so well the Kookamonga days and you were writing awesome poems just like this one. Keep it up. it's so wonderful to know I have so many friends here, but some , like you, go way back to my starting days. I hope our new year will be wonderful to both of us.
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Date: 12/30/2015 8:50:00 PM
Thanks Andy: I appreciate your confidence in my writing and how we go way back. Yes, I hope your New Year brings all you are wishing for, Hugs, SuZ
Date: 12/30/2015 3:56:00 PM
Suzanne, I've read a few of these. I'm inspired to try one out myself. I'm also here to tell you, how much your poetic friendship means to me. You are truly one of my faves. Thank you since the first time we crossed soup mails back in the beginning of 2013......Happy New Year, once again ~LINDA~
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/30/2015 6:10:00 PM
Thanks so much for your uplifting words, Your friendship has kept me coming back here. I did follow Cyndi's guidelines for this but I am not sure it is up to standard, so as yet, I haven't had the courage to enter it. Sending big hugs, SuZ
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Date: 12/30/2015 3:57:00 PM
By the looks of it, It looks like Cyndi's contest :)
Date: 12/29/2015 11:11:00 PM
a composed mind, an opulence of patience: this poem has all this and much more. Good luck with your contest. Victor
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/29/2015 11:28:00 PM
Thanks for visiting, Victor: Glad you like my attempt at free verse. Aloha from SuZ
Date: 12/28/2015 4:55:00 PM
Another great write you can be proud of dear Suzanne x
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Date: 12/28/2015 5:43:00 PM
Thanks Mystic: I am considering it for Cyndi's Free Verse Challenge. Not sure if I have got all the elements required yet, Something tells me I am missing connotation, Will keep playing with it, Hugs, SuZ