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My First Haiku

keep me from crying simply hold my lonely hand please stay forever

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Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 4/10/2011 12:17:00 AM

Dear Dana'Lynn, Who are YOU trying to Fool? " YOUR FIRST HAIKU?? " How does one improve upon perfection? One of my Favorite Forms of POETRY, Superbly Done YOUR Liege, with LOVE, ALWAYS and FOREVER...HG

Daver Austin

Date: 4/2/2011 10:36:00 AM

Love this one. Don't capitalize first words or any of the words in Haiku. This is the rule. Ah, but I don't follow it a lot of the time. Hey! this is 2011! Love, Dave

Carol Fillmore

Date: 4/1/2011 11:44:00 AM

Dana'Lynn, Very nice first haiku/senyru...hope there will be more of these to follow! I started out writing haiku and tanka...found them addictive;)) Thanks for your comments on Anatomy of a Cold. Yes, more poems will follow!

Eiken Laan

Date: 4/1/2011 11:37:00 AM

Dana Lynn, a lovely beginning, liked this a lot. It is more a senryu than a haiku, it is about human nature:))

Stephen Parker

Date: 4/1/2011 8:32:00 AM

Nice start! Warm message touchingly tendered!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/1/2011 8:07:00 AM

Nice feelings of love nicely expressed, It seems you are alright, Dana