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Muse Out of My Way Chanso

The call and response I have with a muse Is playing with my mind and I'm confused Thinking of ghosts whispering in my ear Then all the whispering got all too clear I could see the lady with long brown hair Talking to me and she's very much there Saying 'what do you think of such and such' Response 'I think, I like it very much' Now if I'm on the outside looking in Exactly who resides within the skin A ghost or hallucinogenic state Would a ghost mean I face an iffy fate I settle myself down, forget concerns It is not me and a muse taking turns It was just my mind playing late night tricks So my mind absolutely needs no fix I got straight out of bed, woke up the dog He's not picked up on ghostly dialogue It's just innate drivers handling the show These drivers produce otherworldly flow Nothing much is being offered up now Perhaps all me, 'prompted' to take a bow Rhymezone Howmanysyllables: 10 per line Rhyming couplets aa,bb,cc,dd,ee,ff,gg,hh,ii Last two lines of each stanza have a repeating word, which overall conveys the message of poem summarised: whispering, think, ghost, mind, drivers

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Date: 7/15/2023 10:32:00 AM
Ghostly read indeed! Congratulations! :)
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Date: 7/15/2023 11:54:00 AM
Thanks Linda
Date: 7/11/2023 6:35:00 PM
Oh how we wonder - Would a ghost mean I face an iffy fate… Congratulations, DD!
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Date: 7/11/2023 7:15:00 PM
Thanks Kim x
Date: 4/14/2023 10:25:00 PM
You did well DD. This doesn't look easy and your poem shone. Good luck my friend.
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Date: 4/14/2023 11:00:00 PM
Thank you :)
Date: 4/14/2023 3:31:00 AM
This is a masterful performance...good one. Do like these exercises in duality, lines 5 and 6 are just great. Applause from the gallery.
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Date: 4/14/2023 3:36:00 AM
Hang on, that applause from the gallery was a pun on 'take a bow' wasn't it? I am not getting quicker at spotting puns after all :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/14/2023 3:34:00 AM
Thanks Paul, I was so tired when I wrote this I thought I'd likely delete it today. I'm so pleased with your comment - thank you :) in my head I'd written the equivalent of the cat sat on the mat haha
Date: 4/14/2023 2:42:00 AM
Brilliant, DD:)
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Date: 4/14/2023 3:23:00 AM
Thank you - it was a 3am idea last night. I was staying in a cottage from 1700s and got the creeps on the last night haha

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