Midsummer Night Contest - A Fairy Tale

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Once upon a time in the land of the Hobbits, 
Fili was annoyed.  He wanted excitement.
He was the youngest of the twelve dwarves,
Dressed in a blue cloak and sporting a yellow beard,
He entered into his tree house in an angry mood.
Up in the attic he sat on a stool and pondered.
That night all fairyland would celebrate 
The great feast of Midsummer.  And everyone
Would parade his oft practiced skills.
Alas Fili had nothing spectacular to show.

In the dim light of the attic he spied a shine.
Fili had the best eyesight and somehow knew
There below the cupboard lay an alexandrite lode.
It shone and magic oozed out of it.
What could it be?  He grabbed it and saw
A parchment with strange signs he could not understand.
Yet in the bottom was written so very clear:
Use me to fly, turn, swirl, but you must
Understand the signs or suffer you will.

A Catherine wheel opened the feast lightening the glen.
Immediately thousands upon thousands of fireflies
Flew around and illuminated the open grassy space.
Elves brought in the beer, sweetmeats, firewater.
The Firstborns danced around the Maypole,
Frog dances abounded as elves escorted the Fairy Queen
To her elaborated decorative throne.  She smiled 
And after a while she clapped her hers, and amid the clapping
She gave the sign that the much sought contest can start.

Elves, dwarves, mini giants, and hobbits all performed.
But last was Fili as he strutted to the middle of the glen.
Secretly clutching his alexandrite lode, he flew 
Straight up ten feet with a view for all to see.
Fireflies flew erratically around him, a ghostly shine.
As Fili moved his clutched hand, he turned.
Somersaulted, spun and returned to his standing stance.
Below the people of the glen clapped in awe.
But now Fili was worried, how was he to descend
And thus receive his well merited prize?
It was the River-maid who rescued him, as she flew
And whispered in his ear.  Change the lode to the left hand
She whispered, giving him a luscious kiss.
Soon Fili landed and the Fairy Queen beckoned him.
You can take your first midnight skinny dipping and eat all
The strawberries you like so much, she graciously said.
She took his lode, put it on a crown and on his head it sat.
And now Fili, the hero, was annoyed no more.

Placed 3

29 January 2017
Once Upon a Time - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Eve Roper

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Date: 2/10/2017 8:53:00 PM
Swinging back to congratulate you on your wonderful, well-deserved win, Victor! Hugs. Pandita
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Date: 2/10/2017 6:02:00 PM
Congrats on your top placement.
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Date: 2/10/2017 5:57:00 PM
Congrats on your win Victor
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Date: 2/10/2017 4:23:00 PM
Congrats!!! my friend...a great fairytale story Victor...I don't have the patience for writing them...but you inspired me somewhat...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 2/10/2017 4:08:00 PM
Victor, congratulations on your 3rd place win... My love is reading children's fairytales and you just charmed me with this beauty.. hugs Eve
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Date: 2/3/2017 11:39:00 AM
What a great captivating story - so enjoyable to ready! Bravo, Victor and a 7! Best wishes. Pandita
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Date: 1/30/2017 12:30:00 PM
Very captivating narration. Loved it.
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Date: 1/30/2017 12:02:00 PM
What a great Fairy Tale Victor! You are such a good writer. I enjoy reading your work. This was so creative :) Have a nice day, today!
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Date: 1/30/2017 2:36:00 AM
- Victor, a wonderful enchanting write - This is a pleasure to read .... with small details and smile - Proficient and awesome - a solid 7 - Best wishes for the contest .... hope it will be on the top of the wins list ! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/29/2017 7:58:00 PM
what a sweet tale this is!! Skinny dipping. A bit naughty. Maybe the fairy queen wants a peek!! Nicely done for the contest.
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Date: 1/29/2017 7:35:00 PM
A hobbits tale - always worth a read!
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Date: 1/29/2017 4:35:00 PM
I was excited to see a Tolkienesque poem on the "soup". I have been writing poems for the American Tolkien Society and Beyond Bree for many years. Maybe you would like to send some work to them? Fine poem from the land of Fairie! Namarie Matthew Anish
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Date: 1/29/2017 3:17:00 PM
Beautiful expression and great imagery here Victor. A lovely story fit for a children's book. Good luck my friend. God Bless, JB
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Date: 1/29/2017 2:10:00 PM
you weave a magical, tender fable, victor.. this is fantastic with detailed images..huggs
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Date: 1/29/2017 11:09:00 AM
A story filled with enchantment Victor...Very nicely penned..GL in the contest
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Date: 1/29/2017 8:43:00 AM
Very interesting and fascinating tale ...
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Date: 1/29/2017 6:32:00 AM
A winner has been entered..You do a good job..Thanks for stopping by..There is an explanation(somewhat) of the poem on your comment on the poem "The Baggage Shipment"..A Lockheed C-5 Galaxy is a military cargo airplane that holds 118 tons or 236,000 lbs of baggage or equipment..She had it loaded with her emotional problems..Sara
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Date: 1/29/2017 4:31:00 AM
A captivating tale, Victor:)
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Date: 1/29/2017 3:03:00 AM
That is the love I believe in..
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Date: 1/29/2017 2:56:00 AM
Fascinating tale that captivates the reader. Excellent my friend, Victor. A seven. Good luck!
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Date: 1/29/2017 1:57:00 AM
Would that we all had such a river maid to whisper into our ear and "save us". A charming tale. JH
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Date: 1/29/2017 12:49:00 AM
Wonderful, I call them story telling poems, and I love this style!
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