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loss of speed

Doubt, perhaps there's an anti Cupid shooting arrows, hitting targets I feel the wound, see no one it feels like an external force I'm not laughing, but they are perhaps I should name them I'd pick Stupid but that feels like a reindeer see! Doubt made me say that... I'm nicer without an arrow in my chest Datson appeals as a name - take that! oh - he's still got the upper hand taking goodness and making it drain away I don't want to be full of holes I'm running out of time for this poem an hour glass that can't be turned over no restarting the timer Datson - I'm onto you I will fight you you will not win well, you're on the list 1. shower 2. breakfast 3. take girls to gymnastics 4. pick up bits from shops 5. resolve to defeat self doubt I'm sure you can see I'm serious about this

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/3/2023 12:48:00 PM

I enjoyed this whimsical writing . Datson . Ha !

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/3/2023 1:07:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, it can be fun to write nonsense and see where it goes. Thank you for your comment x

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/3/2023 12:22:00 PM

I like this idea of an invented being to take the heat. It's too late for me. I've already signed the papers that it was always I. A good poem. I smile.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/3/2023 12:29:00 PM

It's never too late Hilda - now I've figured it out we can work out a plan. I'll keep you posted :D

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 12/3/2023 3:05:00 AM

D is for desire, your thoughts do aspire. A is for attractive, inside and out T is for tough, for you are not easily broken S is for sincere, a model of truth. O is for orderly, a lifelong passion. N is for normal, step outside of the box One can always find positivity, especially if they're willing to give it a name! Warmly A.S.

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 12/3/2023 6:14:00 AM

It is done. Rewritten a little bit from my comment below feel free to check it out when you have time. Appreciatively A.S.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/3/2023 3:13:00 AM

feel free - do cite the poem rather than the poet or people might talk haha :D oh and thank you for your kind support

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 12/3/2023 3:09:00 AM

With your permission I would like to post this acrostic based on your poem. While pointing people towards it within its notes. Inspired by you A.S.

Some One

Date: 12/3/2023 1:45:00 AM

This poem is very intriguing. I love the perspective of tackling doubt. Of personifying it with a name. I also appreciate that the battles not over, it's not high up enough on the list; "Datson- I'm onto you/I will fight you/you will not win/well, you're on the list" you did a great job on the storytelling in this poem!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/3/2023 3:14:00 AM

Thank you, it was a silly thought this morning when a bit of negative thought was creeping in and kinda got the heart hurt thing... Made me think of Cupid but not - glad you liked it :)