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i Trees A kaleidoscope cathedral rustling, hustling life-light into every thinning limb. Earth-emblems embalming every rogue marauding cell in resin. Violent poppies dripping blood-petals on never-ending war. Wood knots are eyes, never closing. They must close or shed tears against sear of sunlight, the coffin of night, as tree-pillars confine, toughening with time to bar the light. ii Escape A prison break of glints and tints yearning to move above and beyond; the body sinking to soil as the soul absconds to slip like a wraith through bark-bars of shade and glide through glade; the woodland warm in its cloak of oaks. A liberating light show shifting through sparking trees and the filtering light waltzing with whirling leaves performing a forest floorshow that frees with ease. iii Sun Lifting from ground into lilting light and a choir of cricket sounds; sprites of sunlight dancing and darting through leaves lasered by rays; lifted above and beyond into spark-gilded haze... A sun-stippled urn that's destined to burn, pain dissolving to ash in the furnace of gold. The spectating sun splinters to a thousand little deaths, orgasming shimmers as trees shimmy their last leafless breaths.

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Date: 1/18/2024 2:44:00 PM
wood knots are eyes, never closing is such a masterful use of imagery and so unique. love the imagery you have utilized for a beautiful poem
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Date: 12/8/2023 7:40:00 AM
"Violent poppies dripping blood-petals on never-ending war", "A sun-stippled urn that's destined to burn, pain dissolving to ash in the furnace of gold" Oh my, dear Charlotte, you're truly a stunning poetess and this piece is evident of your artistic skills.. Such a profoundly woven piece with myriad evocative visions that convey heartfelt depths. I also love the way you've presented this! Brilliantly done this is.. Sending you lots of love & light - Hiya.
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Date: 12/6/2023 4:52:00 PM
Hope you're okay, you've been quiet. I know your health is not good. Just wanted to say nice job on your first place win in Cwaigy's contest
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Date: 12/6/2023 11:35:00 AM
Captured this beautifully, and the ending is sublime. The light that dies to the light that brings life. Deserves a trophy.
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Date: 12/4/2023 10:29:00 PM
So happy to see this fine poem earned you a Trophy Win!!! Congrats, Charlotte. Well-deserved win, my friend. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 12/4/2023 8:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement Charlotte - seeing your name near mine gives gravitas to the quality of the judging :)
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Date: 12/3/2023 12:49:00 AM
This is a premier write!!!! You have captured the moments so well. The three parts was a masterly idea. All the best Simon
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Date: 12/2/2023 12:24:00 PM
So amazing. This feels like the breathless promise of a star, portrayed in the night - a light so whimsical and vibrant it almost sings to the spirit - it is dancing through the moments, as your poem - a wish, a feeling, a brilliant and honest glimpse into the miracles of life. Love this so. A fave and Congratulations. God bless you always, love, Gina
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Date: 12/1/2023 12:31:00 PM
Congratulations dear Charlotte, i knew this was worthy of a trophy win. Just brilliant; well deserved
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Date: 12/1/2023 9:13:00 AM
Who knew sunlight could be orgasmic? Anyway, I especially loved the poppy line. If I know Craig, he's going to rate this one highly. Btw, you're an expert on proper, sensical use of alliteration.
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Date: 11/30/2023 6:29:00 AM
I wrote a poem in the format recently, I think it is nice to break it up like this sometimes... You do Craig's contest really well, seems like it inspires your muse... always some form of poetic techniques in your poems, I find naked poetry a turn off, so techniques are really important to me.. nice internal rhymes and alliterations...
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Date: 11/29/2023 6:34:00 PM
Ah Charlotte, this is poetic perfection. You always present the best especially for Craig contests. I can understand why this will be the number one because in my opinion it is the best I’ve read. From imagery to depth of the lines. So much said in such a descriptive manner and you numbering them adds so much beauty. A definite fave this is for me
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 11/30/2023 4:16:00 AM
so kind, thankyou :) i don't know what it is, but craig's contests do seem to bring out the best in me; he may be my male muse lol i'm just a bit concerned because the poem runs slightly over the 20 line limit he imposes but hopefully he'll give a bit of leeway
Date: 11/29/2023 4:28:00 PM
I agree...just wow...tremendous images that left me breathless. Your words also gave me pause for your alliterations and images were almost intense. Wonderfully done, Charlotte. Have a splendid evening, Sara
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 11/30/2023 4:17:00 AM
breathless is good lol thank you, glad you enjoyed
Date: 11/29/2023 4:15:00 PM
Whoah, this is just wow...I don't know... just my breathlessness... this is going into my favs! Such a genius piece!
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 11/30/2023 4:19:00 AM
thanks so much, very kind :)

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