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How Wishes Work

fishing with a fallen star angling using wishing bait do dark thoughts on arced nights unravel fate or gavel bang flights sit temptingly on the surface disguised as joy, distorted lies

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David Kavanagh

Date: 9/15/2024 6:19:00 AM

This is quite a draft attempt Dilly, imagery is powerful and strong, finely balanced and ready to unravel, anglers always live in hope of catching the one that got away, I’ve taken this one hook line and sinker, Going going gone, got to be a Fave, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/15/2024 6:39:00 AM

Well that's a vote and a half of confidence! The idea came out of fish/wish in a few minutes sat waiting outside gymnastics. I'm not sure I have my head round the idea of internal stressed rhymes. Might see if I can haul this one in then and see how it measures up (haha I'm really not that knowledgeable about fishing lol) I did like the word angling though - can't throw that one back... I'll go now lol thanks again :)