Haiku 4

decaying spring rose meander in wind.... petals scatter

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2011 10:47:00 PM

thought I'd check out some of your haiku tonight. I like this one and I see you did not adhere to the strict syllable count. Awesome.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/8/2011 2:46:00 PM

Those windstorms strip flowers of their beauty. Great metaphor on how storms affect our lives as well, Rick. Enjoyed! (You're always at the top of the ladder in my book. That was a hard contest for Carol to judge. So many great entries!)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/5/2011 4:20:00 PM

Very descriptive work..Enjoyed reading..Won't be long before they will be blooming on the Rose Trellis and then scatter their petals all around..Yes, Rick, I want exactly ten syllables per line..It can be done..I am looking forward to reading your work..I know that it will be great.Check spelling, also..Thanks for your presence at my work..Sara

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/5/2011 1:08:00 PM

ahhhh haiku MUST be present tense, try to do it in present tense as if it is happening right now before your eyes and the cut must indicate a shift you have no shift Rick..one more time ;) Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/5/2011 10:25:00 AM

Always a pleasure to read your poetry ^Rick. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

James Foulk

Date: 4/5/2011 10:14:00 AM

i love reading Haiku and this one was a joy to read. I own a lot of poetry books but only one of Haikus, wish i had more, have a good day.