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your breath upon the window freezes lace yet warm against my cheek, its somber strains as dampened words collect in tears to trace the spoor of sorrow weeping from my veins your perfect bows then tremble with a smile soft-press your pitied kiss upon my eyes three words, a whispered falsehood to defile the beggar's hope I’d held of sweet goodbyes one last embrace to mock the frigid air your warm skin buried deep inside your coat the final knife, "goodbye", you bring to bear and drag the jagged word across my throat your chilling crime of passion now complete my love, like blood, lays puddled at your feet. ~ 6th Place ~ in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 6" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 9th Place ~ in the "Shakespearean Sonnet" Poetry Contest, Carolyn Devonshire, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Best Sonnet 2018" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Sponsor. ~ 7th Place ~ in the "Best Sonnet" Poetry Contest, Laura Loo, Sponsor. ~ 7th Place ~ in the "Mid January 2018 Premiere Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

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Line Gauthier

Date: 1/1/2019 12:59:00 PM

Back with more congrats, Gregory.

Craig Cornish

Date: 1/1/2019 12:40:00 PM

Gregory, you are a natural artist who doesn't waste his gift, what a shame that some do - thank you for sharing because everything you write is special.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 12/31/2018 12:17:00 PM

Sublime, haunting piece, Greg!:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win!

Eve Roper

Date: 12/30/2018 8:41:00 PM

Wow!! Amazing , Greg, congratulations on your win; the imagery is fantastic in this well written poem. May you have a blessed Happy New Years. Hugs Eve ~`*

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2018 10:28:00 PM

The very same to you, Dear Eve, and thank you SO much for leaving such a wonderful comment - blessings to you and yours! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/30/2018 8:24:00 PM

CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Greg. Janice

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2018 10:27:00 PM

That's very kind of you, Janice, thank you so much! :-) <3

Mark Toney

Date: 12/30/2018 3:32:00 PM

Greg, congrats on your win on mile 6 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. I don't know what's worse, enduring an "Almost Love" like Lu Loo wrote about, or experiencing a "Frozen Farewell." Yikes! Passionately piercing, poignant and painful! Brilliant! ~Mark

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2018 10:26:00 PM

I am so honored that you found this worthy of placement, Mark, and humbled that it should be listed with such an amazing group of poems and poets! Thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/27/2018 4:50:00 PM

Excellent Greg, but I think they were looking for something in the holiday spirit or this would have placed much, much higher my friend. Congratulations! : )

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/28/2018 4:18:00 PM

(2) I thought perhaps that my exacting syllable count and rhyme might nudge it up, but I knew it was a gamble. No worries, I'm happy to place at ALL, and the comments from wonderful writers like you make it all worthwhile! Blessings, Dear Friend! :-) <3

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/28/2018 4:17:00 PM

Thanks so much, Connie - yes, I'm quite sure you're right, and I knew that going in, but this was the only winter-themed or holiday-connected Sonnet I had. I only started writing Sonnets last year, so I don't have much of a portfolio to draw from, and things have been beyond crazy in my life, so I didn't have time to write a new one in time for this contest. (continued)

Rob Carmack

Date: 10/27/2018 1:24:00 AM

I really enjoyed this one, especially that third stanza. This is one of my favorites in the placement list.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/27/2018 3:43:00 AM

Thank you very much, Rob - I feel this is one of my best poems, and your comment is greatly appreciated, my friend! :-)

Greg Gaul

Date: 7/13/2018 2:08:00 PM

Each word falls in place as if the spot was created just for it. Crafted with skill and heart, what a great read. Congratulations again.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:42:00 PM

This is such a wonderful, heartfelt comment, Greg, and I so greatly appreciate it - many thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/9/2018 4:18:00 PM

Kudos, my friend, on a dagger inserted straight and true into its target! Best always, Gershon

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:41:00 PM

Very kind of you, Gershon, and many sincere thanks as always, my friend! :-)

Constance La France

Date: 7/9/2018 3:37:00 PM

Greg, congratulations on your win in John's contest with this amazing write, well done !

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:40:00 PM

Many kind thanks to you, Constance, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one! Blessings! :-) <3

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/9/2018 6:37:00 AM

This is an extraordinary write, well deserving of first and then some. Congrats!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:40:00 PM

That's very sweet of you, Casarah, and I so greatly appreciate it - blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/8/2018 6:51:00 PM

Ohh I like this!! A fave. Was going to say last 2 lines best but on rereading every line is double emotional. Congratulations on your #1 win. Amazingly dark and sad and good!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:39:00 PM

What a wonderful comment - thank you so much for the kind words, Susan, I greatly appreciate it! :-) <3

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/8/2018 4:20:00 PM

wow, a very dark and beautifully written sonnet. Congrats on your top win!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Andrea ... blessings! :-) <3

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 7/8/2018 3:40:00 PM

Back with congrats! <3

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM

Thank you, Dear Mo! :-) <3

Robert Marlow

Date: 7/8/2018 2:58:00 PM

Incredible Sonnet Gregory. Congratulations on your win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM

Many kind thanks to you, Robert - it is so appreciated! :-)

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/8/2018 1:43:00 PM

Who could forget this spectacular sonnet..? Returning with congratulations, Gregory, on your excellent win with your deep and woeful poem. warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:37:00 PM

That's very sweet of you, Susan, and I so appreciate your wonderful comments! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 7/8/2018 1:12:00 PM

I remember this. Gorgeously worded. Congrats.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:37:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dale - blessings! :-)

John Hamilton

Date: 7/8/2018 12:22:00 PM

Congrats Greg tops again! You know what I think of this poem!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:36:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sir John, I so appreciate the kind words and high placement - I am honored to be on a list with such wonderful writers! :-)

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/4/2018 8:38:00 PM

Hi Gregory, Congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellent piece. It does sing in the sadness of its words. Deep emotions becoming deeper with each read. This one goes into my faves. Have a wonderful Monday....Mike.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:11:00 PM

Many kind thanks to you, Mike ... that's such a wonderful comment, so appreciated, friend! Blessings! :-)

John Hamilton

Date: 3/4/2018 12:17:00 PM

What an amazing write Greg, after 3 or 4 reads it gets better and better, you know me(would have placed this higher) congrats on a nice placement in a tough contest!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:10:00 PM

Very kind of you, my good friend, that means a lot ... I am actually proud of this one. Blessings, Bud! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 3/4/2018 5:29:00 AM

Congratulations, Greg for your win. It is a fabulous poem. I read it three times to get the full flavour.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:09:00 PM

Thank you, Subimal, I so greatly appreciate it! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 3/4/2018 5:25:00 AM

Congratulations, Greg for your win. It is fabulous poem. I read it three times to get the flavour.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:09:00 PM

Thank you, Subimal, I so greatly appreciate it! :-)

Eve Roper

Date: 3/3/2018 10:23:00 PM

You make a poem move with emotion, Greg..Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery ...

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:08:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve, my friend ... blessings! :-) <3

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/3/2018 9:12:00 PM

Exquisite Gregory, in rhythm, rhyme and imagery. Superbly expressed passionate heartbreak.. Congratulations on your excellent win!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/3/2018 9:18:00 PM

That's very kind of you, Susan ... thank you so much!