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Image result for beautiful woman window frost


Your breath upon the window freezes, lace

               Yet, warm against my skin, its somber strains

                              As dampened words collect in tears to trace

       The drip of sorrow weeping from my veins



Your perfect lips then tremble in a smile

               To press your pitied kiss upon my eyes

                              Three words, a whispered lie to thus defile

       The beggar's hope I had of sweet goodbyes



One last embrace, to mock the frigid air

               Your warm skin buried deep within your coat

                              The final knife, "goodbye", you bring to bear

       And drag the jagged word across my throat



Your chilling crime of passion, now complete

               My love, like blood, lays puddled ... at your feet.




~ 6th Place ~  in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 6" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 9th Place ~  in the "Shakespearean Sonnet" Poetry Contest, Carolyn Devonshire, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "Your Best Sonnet 2018" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Sponsor.

~ 7th Place ~  in the "Best Sonnet" Poetry Contest, Laura Loo, Sponsor.

~ 7th Place ~  in the "Mid January 2018 Premiere Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

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Date: 1/1/2019 12:59:00 PM
Back with more congrats, Gregory.
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Date: 1/1/2019 12:40:00 PM
Gregory, you are a natural artist who doesn't waste his gift, what a shame that some do - thank you for sharing because everything you write is special.
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Date: 12/31/2018 12:17:00 PM
Sublime, haunting piece, Greg!:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/30/2018 8:41:00 PM
Wow!! Amazing , Greg, congratulations on your win; the imagery is fantastic in this well written poem. May you have a blessed Happy New Years. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 12/30/2018 10:28:00 PM
The very same to you, Dear Eve, and thank you SO much for leaving such a wonderful comment - blessings to you and yours! :-) <3
Date: 12/30/2018 8:24:00 PM
CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Greg. Janice
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Date: 12/30/2018 10:27:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Janice, thank you so much! :-) <3
Date: 12/30/2018 3:32:00 PM
Greg, congrats on your win on mile 6 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. I don't know what's worse, enduring an "Almost Love" like Lu Loo wrote about, or experiencing a "Frozen Farewell." Yikes! Passionately piercing, poignant and painful! Brilliant! ~Mark
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 12/30/2018 10:26:00 PM
I am so honored that you found this worthy of placement, Mark, and humbled that it should be listed with such an amazing group of poems and poets! Thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)
Date: 10/28/2018 3:39:00 PM
Final Goodbyes leaving one empty - As if snow had been shaken off the Christmas tree - No tinsel no lights not even an angel - bare as cold beauty could be. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/28/2018 4:19:00 PM
Well-said, Michael, and such a wonderfully thoughtful comment ... many thanks to you, my friend! :-)
Date: 10/27/2018 4:50:00 PM
Excellent Greg, but I think they were looking for something in the holiday spirit or this would have placed much, much higher my friend. Congratulations! : )
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Date: 10/28/2018 4:18:00 PM
(2) I thought perhaps that my exacting syllable count and rhyme might nudge it up, but I knew it was a gamble. No worries, I'm happy to place at ALL, and the comments from wonderful writers like you make it all worthwhile! Blessings, Dear Friend! :-) <3
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Date: 10/28/2018 4:17:00 PM
Thanks so much, Connie - yes, I'm quite sure you're right, and I knew that going in, but this was the only winter-themed or holiday-connected Sonnet I had. I only started writing Sonnets last year, so I don't have much of a portfolio to draw from, and things have been beyond crazy in my life, so I didn't have time to write a new one in time for this contest. (continued)
Date: 10/27/2018 1:24:00 AM
I really enjoyed this one, especially that third stanza. This is one of my favorites in the placement list.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/27/2018 3:43:00 AM
Thank you very much, Rob - I feel this is one of my best poems, and your comment is greatly appreciated, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/13/2018 2:08:00 PM
Each word falls in place as if the spot was created just for it. Crafted with skill and heart, what a great read. Congratulations again.
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:42:00 PM
This is such a wonderful, heartfelt comment, Greg, and I so greatly appreciate it - many thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/9/2018 4:18:00 PM
Kudos, my friend, on a dagger inserted straight and true into its target! Best always, Gershon
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:41:00 PM
Very kind of you, Gershon, and many sincere thanks as always, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/9/2018 3:37:00 PM
Greg, congratulations on your win in John's contest with this amazing write, well done !
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:40:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Constance, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 7/9/2018 6:37:00 AM
This is an extraordinary write, well deserving of first and then some. Congrats!
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:40:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Casarah, and I so greatly appreciate it - blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 7/8/2018 6:51:00 PM
Ohh I like this!! A fave. Was going to say last 2 lines best but on rereading every line is double emotional. Congratulations on your #1 win. Amazingly dark and sad and good!
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:39:00 PM
What a wonderful comment - thank you so much for the kind words, Susan, I greatly appreciate it! :-) <3
Date: 7/8/2018 4:20:00 PM
wow, a very dark and beautifully written sonnet. Congrats on your top win!
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Andrea ... blessings! :-) <3
Date: 7/8/2018 3:40:00 PM
Back with congrats! <3
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM
Thank you, Dear Mo! :-) <3
Date: 7/8/2018 2:58:00 PM
Incredible Sonnet Gregory. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:38:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Robert - it is so appreciated! :-)
Date: 7/8/2018 1:43:00 PM
Who could forget this spectacular sonnet..? Returning with congratulations, Gregory, on your excellent win with your deep and woeful poem. warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:37:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Susan, and I so appreciate your wonderful comments! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 7/8/2018 1:12:00 PM
I remember this. Gorgeously worded. Congrats.
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Date: 7/13/2018 10:37:00 PM
Thank you so much, Dale - blessings! :-)
Date: 7/8/2018 12:22:00 PM
Congrats Greg tops again! You know what I think of this poem!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/13/2018 10:36:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sir John, I so appreciate the kind words and high placement - I am honored to be on a list with such wonderful writers! :-)
Date: 3/4/2018 8:38:00 PM
Hi Gregory, Congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellent piece. It does sing in the sadness of its words. Deep emotions becoming deeper with each read. This one goes into my faves. Have a wonderful Monday....Mike.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:11:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Mike ... that's such a wonderful comment, so appreciated, friend! Blessings! :-)
Date: 3/4/2018 12:17:00 PM
What an amazing write Greg, after 3 or 4 reads it gets better and better, you know me(would have placed this higher) congrats on a nice placement in a tough contest!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:10:00 PM
Very kind of you, my good friend, that means a lot ... I am actually proud of this one. Blessings, Bud! :-)
Date: 3/4/2018 5:29:00 AM
Congratulations, Greg for your win. It is a fabulous poem. I read it three times to get the full flavour.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:09:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal, I so greatly appreciate it! :-)
Date: 3/4/2018 5:25:00 AM
Congratulations, Greg for your win. It is fabulous poem. I read it three times to get the flavour.
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Date: 3/4/2018 9:09:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal, I so greatly appreciate it! :-)
Date: 3/3/2018 10:23:00 PM
You make a poem move with emotion, Greg..Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery ...
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/4/2018 9:08:00 PM
Thank you very much, Eve, my friend ... blessings! :-) <3
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