Draft 1,2,3,4 then gave up
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Playing around with the idea I'll fix this poem draft to draft. Found less and less in the poem when I returned to it. Not sure I can really go back to poems. Might try revising an old one in the future but think they either work or they don't for me.
Saturday - Draft 4, turned to Sunday but didn't finish as revising and editing doesn't seem to be my way.
Villanelle
Please leave it out, just cut the rain
Inevitable as storm prediction
Rested eyes see pressure builds pain
Umbrella forgotten again and again
Clear moments lead me to cling to fiction
Please leave it out, just cut the rain
In denial I'd rather consult a weather vane
Lose faith in self, evaporate my conviction
Yet rested eyes see pressure builds pain
Fall into cliché of wishing not to complain
Becoming I fear like unwanted subscription
Please leave it out, just cut the rain
Running to a shelter in the eye of the hurricane....
11pm Friday - Draft 3
Cut the rain
today is not the day I'm destroyed
those are pebbles underfoot
there's tilt but I'm not unsteady
Evidence is clear as I let hazed eyes rest
unfettered by storm
they see me upright, standing
not dropped to the ground
Cut the wind and all weather
leave me with this strength
not to forget or repeat
but always see clearly
When pattering raindrops
hung too long in the sky
finally fall
let them wake me up
***************
9:30pm Friday - Draft 2
Cut the rain
I'm undecided if today is the day I'm destroyed
perhaps there are pebbles underfoot
and I'm not unsteady
Evidence through hazed eyes
unfettered by storm
sees me upright
not yet dropped to the ground
Cut the wind and all weather
leave me standing
but not unforgetting
of all I need to change
When pattering raindrops start
after they hung too long in the sky
waking me up or drowning me out
remind me I need shelter
*****************
9am Friday - Draft 1
Cut the rain
I can't decide if I'm destroyed today
Maybe I'm walking on pebbles, not unsteady
The evidence I see
Through unhazed eyes
Unfettered by storm
Is upright
Not yet dropped to the ground
Cut the wind and all weather
Leave me standing
But not unforgetting
Of all I need to change
For when pattering rain drops start
After they hung too long in the sky and
Wake me up or drown me out
Re-mind me
What
I need to do
About
It all
Copyright © Di11y Da11y | Year Posted 2024
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