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I grew up in North Texas and lived most of my adult there here until hubby and I moved to El Paso and took teaching jobs in Fabens, Texas, a small border town.  I was leery about the move and initially found the desert unappealing, secretly wishing I could be transported back to my native North Texas.  Hubby and I stayed in the area and taught in Fabens for 14+ years--the best and most purposeful teaching experience we ever had. 

I glanced in the side view mirror of the U-Haul truck. One mile forward, one more, and then another. With each mile forward everything familiar slipped further and further away. The lush, tree-covered green hills of North Texas slowly gave way to the parched, bland Permian Basin with its sage brush and low-lying mesquite trees. By late afternoon, absolutely nothing was in front of us except miles of dry, hot Chihuahan Desert. Flat was the land—yellow, ochre, and brown. A dust storm barreled through the desert, forcing us off the Interstate. The only thing visible was a battered barrel cactus, some cinder block houses, and a ramshackle motel aptly named The Desert View Motel. The hot wind carried the dust across the parking lot of the motel and deeper into town where all the dirt roads seemed to lead nowhere in particular. “How could anyone live in this god-forsaken, gritty, colorless, treeless land?” I thought. Hubby and I checked into the motel and waited for the dust storm to pass. I woke early the next morning, the sun sparkling off the dusty venetian blinds casting a warm glow across the room. I peeked through the blinds, surprised that the sky was now abundantly clear. The sun glistened across the sand beckoning me outside. I stood at the doorway and cried, “Oh God, take me from this place—the sand, the heat, and the vacant horizon.” A voice said, “It is no desert.” I shielded my eyes, looking far off in the distance. The aridity had somehow freed the light unleashing the desert’s grandeur. The sky was a dazzling, intense blue color. The sand dunes took on sunlight and pulse. I could see tiny clouds of sand floating above the ground like smoke. It was breathtaking! No, the earth here wasn’t cloaked in forest, nor draped in pastoral, peaceful green. Instead, it donned a simple, khaki-colored robe embellished with a colorful sunrise, splendid fishhook barrel cacti, yellow desert marigolds, and desert dandelions to name a few. I just had to look more closely to see the beauty surrounding me.
flower in desert blooms beneath the blazing sun same hope inside me

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Date: 9/4/2023 6:33:00 PM
My good friend, you have indeed gave us an image feast. This is a true pleasure to read. Your eye for detail and descriptive powers are on full display. A true gem and a fav for me. I marvel at your story telling abilities. God bless.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/5/2023 3:46:00 AM
Thank you, Robert, for your kind and complimentary words. I appreciate you reading my work and for faving this one. Enjoy your day, your poet friend, Sara
Date: 9/4/2023 3:13:00 PM
Your imagery and description of the desert were both exquisite, Sara. You are becoming a Haibun expert. The Haibun allows you to marry your excellence in writing write your newly found gift of writing poetry. I proud of your growth and thank you for sharing your thoughts with us through poetry. Love, Bill
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 3:20:00 PM
thank you, dear hubby, for your kind words about my writing and growth as a writer. Know I could do any of it without you and your never-ending support. love you back, Sara
Date: 9/4/2023 7:40:00 AM
This was absolutely delightful to read dear Sara. So engaging. Imagery was vivid with great storytelling. I particularly liked the line, ‘The sand dunes took on sunlight and pulse’. The haiku concludes the haibun beautifully. A wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. Much blessings to you both.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 7:56:00 AM
Thank you, Christina, for stopping by and for commenting on my haibun. I appreciate your kind words and appreciation. Have a great day, Sara
Date: 9/4/2023 6:48:00 AM
When we see beauty that is not visible to others we are catching a glimpse of our own souls.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 7:58:00 AM
Wow, insightful! I like the way you think. I can agree with you....a poem in the making :-) Best wishes, Sara
Date: 9/4/2023 6:46:00 AM
This is damn good poetry. I like the Haiku at the end, a nice touch.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 7:57:00 AM
Thank you ever so much, Richard. I appreciate your reading my haibun and commenting. Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 9/4/2023 6:29:00 AM
How beautiful is this haibun, i love the storytelling, the emotions expressed and how descriptive it is. Sometimes moving places can be challenging. Often times it is challenging for me. There were so many great lines in this, i especially love how you described the sky and flowers etc and colors used. And also the haiku perfectly sums up the whole prose. Ah a flower in the desert, blooming, how creative and deep is that. I also thought to myself as i read that a voice-
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 8:01:00 AM
thank you for stopping by and for making wonderful observations and making such exquisite comments. Yes, sometimes we do need to listen to the voices inside our heads. Even your comments are poetic. I appreciate you! Have a blessed day, Sara
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Date: 9/4/2023 6:30:00 AM
Inside whispered it isnt a desert , and for you to open your eyes and see everything vibrant, different yet beautiful. Made me think , sometimes we need to change the voices in our head to see things from a more colorful and soulful perspective … love this one. I still need to try haibun
Date: 9/4/2023 5:21:00 AM
I love your life snippets and though a haibun is generally written in the present, I've seen some based on the past too. I especially like your last line "I just had to look more closely to see the beauty surrounding me". Amen
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/4/2023 8:00:00 AM
thank you, kind sir, for stopping by and reading my haibun. I somtimes forget to use the present tense..a storyteller's remorse, I suppose. :-) Have a wonderful day. Sara

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