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Crying Girl - Roy Lichtenstein

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It's nothing, the tear can be wiped away The emotion neatly swept aside today Discreetly dealt with, it's alright I cried out my eye colour during my plight The only indication of my altered state Don't talk about it, or my sadness tinged fate Viewed close up there is no other trace Feel free to be near, study my face Come closer, I do not really mind To be gazed at feels... almost kind Not quite seeing past my unfilled eyes I can't expect an onlooker to realise That something happened to me Something invisible for anyone to see My heart broke over and over again Created deep chasms filled with pain Scattered all over my brain and heart Creating an empty feeling, I'm set apart But I find comfort residing here with you Yet the tears sometimes still seep through Telling that all is not what it may appear A neglected child remains full of fear The unfixable, rewired to malfunction Fixated on false compunction Always feeling it's me at fault Impervious to attempt to exalt Extrapolation of very minor matters Self talk negates me as it chatters But forget all that, for this moment please I'll rest, watched over, feeling safe, at ease It's a fleeting feeling, I'm aware of this You'll go, comforting embrace I'll miss I'll look to steady myself, I'll try But all the broken pieces make me cry Left to think, all my tears they fall Because when I look at myself, I see nothing at all

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Date: 7/29/2023 8:36:00 PM
Great analysis and beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/29/2023 11:54:00 PM
Thank you - I hadn't realised I could find so much in this type of art. I've done 3 now on Lichtenstein :)
Date: 7/29/2023 10:50:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem - so, so sad - especially the last line. Great skilful writing and incredibly touching. Thank you for sharing. Warmest wishes to you.
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Date: 7/29/2023 10:57:00 AM
Thank you Christina, ekphrasis is such an amazing device for unlocking emotion - I'm grateful to Brian as I only tried it (several months ago now) to try and succeed in one of his contests but I love it now x
Date: 7/27/2023 1:49:00 AM
Simply mind-blowing poetry, DD, though this is a tad bit sad, you have done absolute justice to that piece of art!!!
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Date: 7/27/2023 1:53:00 AM
Thank you Jo - three exclamation marks and the words 'mind blowing' ooh and the word 'absolute'... Thank you :')
Date: 7/27/2023 1:15:00 AM
Put a rubber band around your wrist and when the hateful words want to run rampant get your attention with a little pop hug that child and say aloud STOP. The thought recently is that anxiety is a habit.Being stuck in a loop layed down long ago.Those connections need to be Weakened and newer healthier tracks layed down.Also say something nice to counteract.If the nasty voice says your needy for example say who isn't I love you .Be your own and best advocate .You have a gift .
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Date: 7/27/2023 1:35:00 AM
It's good advice Vickey, I've not really put much effort into reprogramming, thank you for your supportive words x

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