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Crescent Moon

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The inspiration for this double tanka poem came to me in the pre-dawn hours

when I observed a crescent moon hanging over our house. I

imagined hubby and I slipping into the keyhole after we pass,

always together and disappearing for eternity

the crescent moon shines magic keyhole in night sky the stars beckon us we escape through the keyhole at last, untethered and free &&&& the galaxies and stars greet us as we travel by cosmic dancers swirl silver sequins in the night guide us to eternity

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Sotto Poet

Date: 9/21/2023 6:08:00 PM

Dear Sara, your exceptional piece on a great subject was truly enlightening. The vivid imagery, skillful employment of metaphors, and compelling arguments showcased in your writing are truly magnificent. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/22/2023 3:48:00 AM

thanks, kind sir, for your comments and compliments about my writing. Your words always mean a great deal to me. I appreciate you taking the time and stopping by. You make my day poetic. :-) Hope you enjoy yours, Sara

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/18/2023 4:52:00 PM

Ahhh!! Some couples really share a very special love for a lifetime, and it seems that you do share that with your husband. I enjoyed reading these lines. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/22/2023 3:49:00 AM

thanks, too, Sara, for stopping by and visiting my poetry. Yes, Bill & I share a special love for each other, a bond that's truly miraculous to me at times. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Have a wonderful day...the 'other' Sara :-)

Bill Baker

Date: 9/18/2023 4:44:00 PM

You are always so observant when we take our walks, Sara, you've created a beautiful poem from your observations. I think your choice of form was excellent. This one has to go on my FAVs list. :-) Have a blessed week! Bill

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 4:51:00 PM

thank you, dear hubby, for reading and commenting on my poem. I'll be looking for you on the other side of the keyhole...hugs, me

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/18/2023 2:25:00 PM

This is absolutely elegant, Sara. Such a creative, imaginative idea. I think it should be POTD. A FAVE for me. Thank you! ~ Gershon

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 4:02:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words and compliment. The poem was a delight to write. I appreciate you faving it...perhaps one day it will be POTD...that would be awesome. Have a wonderful evening, Sara

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/18/2023 11:13:00 AM

So beautiful in its creativity, Sara with twirling "cosmic dancers," and a "magic key hole" - a portal to transport you into a new universe. This is so unique and beautifully articulated! Wonderful images - a ride into mystic wonder and the mystical. Blessings for your journey.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 11:55:00 AM

thank you, Sam, for stopping by and reading my poem. I appreciate your comments and for you noticing those words 'magic keyhole.' I felt like I was on a mystical journey when I created it. blessings for your day

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/18/2023 5:38:00 AM

This is simply gorgeous Sara. The poem and the picture go so well together. I love the night sky and gazing up and your beautiful poem captured so much that the night sky has to offer. This is such a dreamy read- captivating! The last two lines, in particular, are as stunning as the night sky. Really enjoyed this gentle, romantic ,hopeful poem. Thank you for sharing.Wishing you both a blessed week. X

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 7:47:00 AM

thanks, Christina, for your visit. I, too, love the night sky. I find it inspirational. I'm glad you liked the picture and the last two lines. I'm a romantic at heart (for my hubby of course) :-) Have a wonderful day, Sara

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 9/18/2023 12:34:00 AM

A beautiful poem. Well written.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 4:03:00 AM

thanks, Jeanette, for stopping by and for reading my poem. Have a lovely day, Sara

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 9/18/2023 12:27:00 AM

Aw Sara, what an enchanting double tanka... That is the magic of poetry isn't it? You could never know from where inspiration comes... "cosmic dancers swirl"... lovely... Enjoyed reading... Hugs... ~ Ani

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 4:04:00 AM

You're so right, Ani. Inspiration can come from anywhere, anytime. Thanks for stopping by....hugs for your day, Sara :-)

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/17/2023 8:25:00 PM

Dear Sara, this poem is so beautifully carved with the most beautiful hue of love and the inspiration behind these two tankas, as you described, is equally heartwarming.. To be able to escape for eternity into the celestial eden with your loved one.. So mesmerizing. "The stars beckon us, we escape through the keyhole", "the galaxy and stars greet us", " Cosmic dancers swirl" Absolutely gorgeous :) have a beautiful day, loved reading this!

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/18/2023 4:05:00 AM

Thank you, Hiya, for stopping by and for reading my 'escape' into eternity. I'm glad you found the poem gorgeous and hopefully uplifting. Have a blessed Monday, Sara

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 9/17/2023 4:19:00 PM

Hello lovely Sara,smooth enjoyed read of your fantastic poem! Lovely lovely!!

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/17/2023 4:33:00 PM

thank you for stopping by and for commenting on my recent poem. I'm grateful you enjoyed it. Have a blessed evening, Sara