Breezy

Lay in the hammock I look around for the source of the music There's a blackbird taking the credit Though I see he doesn't have a guitar His stage is the neighbours chimney And he's every bit the front man Beak syncing in time The dog is running under the hammock Raising me up Or maybe in this daydream I'm crowd surfing I sway in the sun Aware of a paradise behind my eyes The softness of the seconds before sleep And the permission to just be

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Paul Willason

Date: 5/12/2024 6:04:00 PM

I want to be in that space DD....sounds just perfect to be in that dimension. Can I book the next session. Your poem captures the mood perfectly and although imparts a sense of peace...I feel a twinge of envy....to drift off in a hammock....bliss. Good one dear DD.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/13/2024 1:15:00 AM

Ahh the afternoon snooze, protected from the sun but aware of it and the heat offset with a breeze. Those seconds as you drift off are quite something. Thank you for stopping by, always a delight

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/11/2024 9:01:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your lonely "Breezy" write/story. When you are done, can I have your hammock??? Sounds wonderful. Hahaha!!! Have A Blessed Weekend Writing Away.........

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/11/2024 9:04:00 AM

Thanks Paula, not at all lonely (in fact it's quite a feat to remain alone in the hammock). Best purchase I ever made getting it, it's wonderful - highly recommend :)

David Kavanagh

Date: 5/11/2024 6:04:00 AM

Crowd surfing as the blackbird takes centre stage, this is a dreamy one, you even have the hammock to nod off if he slows things down a bit, I hope people get the picture you paint here as I do, and visualise the image you’ve projected, excellent surreal poetry, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/11/2024 6:23:00 AM

It requires the correct wave length this one :) I've long since stopped writing for mass appeal, it's nicer to be niche