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For Pie in the Sky contest using experimental haibun form which encourages creativity in a two part (or three part, if including title) poem.

unstable equilibrium meets dowsing rod laid precariously on tectonic plates to predict fate one needs to be aware and stare dreamily into middle distance readiness meets waiting inbetween the here and now and neverland

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Peonieslore xo

Date: 9/22/2024 12:48:00 PM

"readiness meets waiting inbetween the here and now and neverland" beautiful, wa-la. A fav

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/22/2024 1:23:00 PM

Thank you for the fave - appreciated :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/18/2024 5:59:00 PM

I like the symbol of the dowsing rod. It brings superstition into this story. I like these ideas.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/22/2024 1:23:00 PM

Thanks Hilda

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/17/2024 11:47:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your write. Wonderful Ending... "Good Luck" Have a fun day writing away................

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/17/2024 1:13:00 PM

Thank you Paula, appreciated

David Kavanagh

Date: 9/17/2024 11:27:00 AM

A divining little piece Dilly, I have no scientific faith whatsoever in dowsing rods, however to predict fate one certainty needs consciousness, and perhaps a little spiritualism, love the equational monoku that brings a sense of equilibrium to your Haibun, A thought provoking piece, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/17/2024 1:12:00 PM

Hehe cute! (Divining) - pretty sure I found 2p near a privit as a child using a makeshift dowsing rod, so I won't rule them out :) I quite enjoyed writing my couple of attempts at this contest even though my rhyme efforts are probably off. It's a bit like a word association game. Playing with the haibun form is quite freeing too - glad you felt it worked. Thanks for you comment as always