An Unexpected Tale - The Escape of the Golden Oriole

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On his twenty-fifth birthday, elated 
He decided to go hunting.
He let the fresh air of the early morning
On the slope of a wooded hill fill his lungs.
A small vale stretched beneath him, 
Whilst behind the trees rose a small sheer cliff. 

That was where he saw the golden oriole.
 
It was a beautiful specimen.
Martin admired its graceful flight 
And the bird seemed to enjoy itself too. 
He observed it intently as it glided, soared, turned, 
And flew happily over the old gnarled trees below. 

Suddenly a hellish kestrel appeared in the sky. 
It hovered above, eyes glinting, beak poised. 
The oriole sensed it immediately. 
Irrationally it defied the bird of prey, 
For it continued its fancy flight 
Until the kestrel began its dive. 
Then the oriole flew directly towards the cliff 
And inexplicably disappeared.
It was the worst birthday of Martin’s life.


This can be considered a prologue. Must be continued to discover the unexpected…..

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 5/1/2018 2:01:00 PM
You've left us with a cliffhanger Victor I must seek out and read part 2:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/30/2018 9:04:00 AM
Now you have aroused my eager curiosity, Victor....on to part two. // paul
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Date: 4/30/2018 4:12:00 AM
WoW! Victor, You have penned such a well written tale. It was engaging and suspenseful. You are such an amazing story teller. One of the best on the soup. I can't to see what happens next. Well done:-) Alexis
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Date: 4/30/2018 2:50:00 AM
A great story, and you leave the reader wanting more, the mark of an accomplished writer that you truly are. Off to read part two now Victor, I'm sure it will be just as exciting with a famous twist? I've come to expect nothing less from you. Excellence ....Maria Hugs
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Date: 4/29/2018 10:06:00 AM
can hardly wait for the epilogue, victor!.. huggs
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Date: 4/29/2018 7:39:00 AM
Wonderful story, yes waiting for the conclusion.
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Date: 4/29/2018 4:07:00 AM
An intriguing prologue, Victor! I'll keep watching and waiting!
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Date: 4/28/2018 12:08:00 PM
Looking forward to part 2!
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Date: 4/27/2018 9:28:00 PM
The hunt is on...An interesting tale Victor
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Date: 4/27/2018 9:09:00 PM
You are so good with stories, Victor. I think I know the ending but let's hear if there is more!!!
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Date: 4/27/2018 3:43:00 PM
Eager to read part 2..great story in your poem, Victor. I am guessing it has happy ending!
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Date: 4/27/2018 3:16:00 PM
Great imagery with a pen , a canvas painted in the mind.
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Date: 4/27/2018 1:42:00 PM
will martin's oriole come back? beautiful and mystical work, victor.. huggs
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Date: 4/27/2018 12:17:00 PM
Ah, methinks the golden oriole still lives. Looking forward to part two, Victor. I once came between a large hawk and a baby owl. The owl was so grateful that it made its home in my backyard for years. Memorable day. Let me know when part two is posted. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/27/2018 11:54:00 AM
Vanished into thin air...a cloaking device...awaiting part 2...All the best Victor
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Date: 4/27/2018 10:54:00 AM
You are a master story teller ... the prologue is tremendously enjoyable ... The intensity of the tragedy to unfold remains a suspense ... Your description is marvelous ...
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Date: 4/27/2018 6:44:00 AM
The intriguing subject of your well-crafted poem my friend Victor has sharpened my poetic hunger so I cannot wait for part two and three...Good luck!
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Date: 4/27/2018 5:40:00 AM
Keeping a crazy bird lady hanging, it's a good thing you're cute! x
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Date: 4/27/2018 5:38:00 AM
- One day that started so beautiful ... and ended up so sad, Victor - A lovely writing - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/27/2018 4:57:00 AM
An intriguing story. Lovely narration. Loved it...
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Date: 4/27/2018 4:21:00 AM
You've got me on the hook, eagerly awaiting Part 2 and hoping life doesn't cause me to forget that I am doing so. The yellow cardinal needs us, we must take him from the unknown in to a safe zone. I am intrigued and impressed, Victor! Nudge me if I should forget the golden bird, please! All the best ... CayCay (will Martin's BDay get better?) Oh, don't know
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