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a shiver of sharks

a shiver of sharks ever closer the dead eyes rose tint glosses

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I Am Anaya

Date: 8/21/2024 1:45:00 PM

genious! How long did it take you to come up with the last line? I enjoyed the conflicting feel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/21/2024 9:22:00 PM

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/21/2024 5:50:00 PM

ha, the rose tinted glasses vs glosses over the inevitable doom...woe

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/21/2024 2:49:00 PM

Thanks Anaya, you know by now everything I write is on instinct and just a minute max per line. I did have to swap out some lines due to the verb issue though... Do you get blood in the water but convincing yourself it's ok from my line? I wonder if I hit on something better but haven't spotted it myself haha :)

Suzette Richards

Date: 8/16/2024 12:46:00 AM

Congrats DD - loved the last line (it sent shivers down my spine) - the pun was well done. :)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/16/2024 3:19:00 PM

Hurray! I wasn't sure if I'd been too oblique :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/13/2024 11:16:00 AM

I'm with Andrea - sharks make me shiver! But, how great to find that word for sharks! Blessings and best wishes for the contest.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/16/2024 3:18:00 PM

It was a fun find! I don't mind them to be fair - only had little ones swimming near me though, I might change my mind if I large one showed up

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/31/2024 1:20:00 PM

They certainly would make ME shiver. Love the animal expression you chose to use, Dilly Dally.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/31/2024 2:47:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, I don't think I've met all the criteria but we'll see :)