On the Dark Verge of Insanity

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My soul is spine-chilling silent. All is mute.
A vortex of sickening emotions
alternating with passive indifference,
to a dance on the verge of mental damage.
I have much to confess and expound,
but I lost my composure and lucid thoughts.
For now my introspections are jumbled
as if I'm in a teasing irresolvable fiery maze.
Am I at best an obscure senseless shadow?

Nothing creeps into my murky misty mind.
Perhaps it is overfilled
with a dismal cacophony of nothingness.
So I hold my tongue despite the urge
to utter profanities.
What is holding me back?
What deleterious demon rides my back?
What is pulling me downwards
towards a cold dark and bottomless sea?
Have my bones lost their marrow?
Is my mind devoid of gray cells?

Emptiness cries for febrile revenge
yet I cling to life by a tapering thread.
I cannot cry, too angry for that.
I cannot yell, a block in my windpipe
as if I'm lost among mountains
where no meaningless echo resounds.
Yet words must be uttered
or I'll go insane.
I'm lost in a world wide web
where there's too much sound.

13 September 2017

Placed 8

In The Dark
N/A
Contest Judged: 9/22/2017 

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Date: 10/13/2017 5:12:00 AM
Blessings and heart-felt congratulations on your win, Victor - wonderful work and well-earned, my friend! :-)
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Date: 10/11/2017 10:54:00 PM
Congratulations, Victor om your placement with such a beautiful poem.
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Date: 10/11/2017 9:05:00 PM
Victor, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful poem in my contest!
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Date: 9/15/2017 10:27:00 PM
Wow Victor! This is incredible writing. Sharp, vivid imagery with wonderful language that delves deep beneath the dark, with a precision that is astounding to read. An excellent write, a fave
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Date: 9/15/2017 12:45:00 PM
A very deep & dark poem with powerful imagery and stunning vocabulary. I hope to see this high on the winners' list!! Regards, John.
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Date: 9/15/2017 8:55:00 AM
Your vocabulary is great, you have written a deep and dark write..
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Date: 9/14/2017 8:53:00 AM
You write these dark ones so well, Victor:) amazing, especially the ending lines:)
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Date: 9/14/2017 8:51:00 AM
You dark old boy you lol...I'll get you out, Victor...let me just pull up the mouse cord lol...great dark write my friend...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 9/14/2017 8:23:00 AM
Demetrios's description "poetic genius" says it all Victor.
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Date: 9/14/2017 5:59:00 AM
My dearest friend, Victor I am not around that much any longer but your poetic genius seems to have reached the apex of your poetic expression! Wondrous writing my friend!
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Date: 9/13/2017 11:40:00 PM
In one word "Awesome", what an incredible write." I'm lost in a world wide web, where there's too much sound" My fave lines, and it is a fave for me too...Maria xx
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Date: 9/13/2017 12:47:00 PM
Incredible write, Victor, you out did yourself in this deep write,,, Luck in the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 9/13/2017 10:39:00 AM
Too much sound indeed, such a brooding dark place you took us to. Should be a great write for the contest, my hope is that's all it's for...
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Date: 9/13/2017 10:03:00 AM
What a wondrous journey through the mind you brought us, loved your usage of alliteration.
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Date: 9/13/2017 9:48:00 AM
Wrought with emotion! Love the last two lines! The web can sound quiet or all too cacophonous! I tear myself away often and do something else. <3 Kim
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Date: 9/13/2017 8:29:00 AM
Good luck Victor! This is a strong cry for help from within a tangled mind. Powerful and frightening.
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Date: 9/13/2017 6:09:00 AM
A dark insight on life well depicted by an expert word artist who spins the words into magical themes--good luck to win, Victor!
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Date: 9/13/2017 8:29:00 AM
Date: 9/13/2017 5:37:00 AM
In the dark many a light and sound that we enjoy ... How wonderfully your imagination employs the beautiful words to bring out the touching emotions ... Nice, Victor ... Good luck ...
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Date: 9/13/2017 3:32:00 AM
- A deep poem with touching feelings, dear Victor - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/13/2017 2:47:00 AM
A powerful write! I can identify with this poem for sure, Victor! Looking back on my life, some years have been bad for me, and this year has not been a good one, on several fronts. We have to battle on and rely on our inner strength. Wishing you well, my friend!
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