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Vernal Void

a black-eyed sea ……a wave of ice a knotted mouth ……a killer’s vice a candle’s blood ……a blind man’s palm a twist of fate ……a beggar’s plate a midnight sky ……an amber eye a thunder’s fist ……a sleepy mist ~ a lover bent ……a narrow gate, a body bound ……annihilate a twist of blue ……a fleck of night an angled blade ……a window’s shade a sensation sought ……a touch of grace a glint of love ……a tombstone face an equinox ……a vernal light a carnal god ……a dead façade ~ a lover bent ……a narrow gate a body bound ……annihilate Oh, body bound, light exhumes madness, annihilation …descends then obscures, the smoke from dead bone, spits and flutters …the wind will do that there is rot in the air, threads of sick, tendrils, sharp memory wrap and choke (will the wind do that?) then piercing deep, take root in bores and chambers, firing pin caress striking…I pray vernal light, take me away ~

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Date: 11/26/2023 8:08:00 PM
Very deep and heavy... you rhymed with such ease... I enjoyed reading.... I believe in God though, don't count Him out... He's at the end of madness... all the best, just me! :)
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 8:40:00 PM
thank you for taking the time, i always appreciate anyone who will speak from the heart -
Date: 11/26/2023 2:31:00 PM
the words you've paired together are superb and to have those lines rhyme is true genius or perhaps poetic brilliance. I also note the repeated lines at the end of the 1st and 2d stanza. Doing so anchored your poem and added strength to your message. Your imagery and alliterations were also outstanding....so much to relish about your words. Masterfully done, Mat! Have a great week ahead, Sara
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 5:34:00 PM
thank you, sara, as always for your kindness - my deepest gratitude to you
Date: 11/26/2023 12:11:00 PM
Quite macabre mat-ster
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 12:57:00 PM
thank you, tom
Date: 11/26/2023 11:10:00 AM
you take darkness to a new level, well done Mat
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 12:56:00 PM
thank you clive -
Date: 11/26/2023 11:01:00 AM
You have a way with pairing words so artistically, the flow of this is beyond brilliant and youve delivered so many excellent lines that truly drew me in from the very first line. But i love mostly the title, the alliterations and also “ a midnight sky, an amber eye, thunder’s fist, sleepy mist, lover bent a narrow gate” just wow! Love this! So powerful A fave for me!
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 12:56:00 PM
thank you for the kind words - wrestled with this last night
Date: 11/26/2023 10:56:00 AM
You have a genius poetic mind.. read this a few times to process it... I can feel the angst in your words.. this is deep introspection..
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 11/26/2023 12:56:00 PM
i appreciate this, thank you

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