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Originally published: 18th February 2021

Image by 1820796 from Pixabay

Seagull Sound Effects obtained from https://www.zapsplat.com.


 

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I walked downhill towards the sea And left behind the train Motionless at its terminus Exposed to driving rain. A gull perched on a wet sea wall Shrieked out its gull like sound. It never moved as I walked by But stared and stood its ground. The mist and sky were grey and one And rain was teeming hard As thick wet sheets of 'nothingness' Blanked out the promenade. A man head bowed against the storm And dog chasing its tail Were at the mercy on the beach Of rain that froze to hail. There were parts of town I recognized And parts that I’d forgot The cinema had disappeared But the Beach Café had not. With all its red formica tables And warm and cosy light A small café dispelled the cold And put the rain to right. There was beauty and some sadness too Jolting memories by the sea. I’d reached out to a time long gone.. ..And it half reached back to me. This poem is an edited version of an earlier poem: Vacancies

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Date: 3/11/2021 1:24:00 PM
Lovely atmospheric descriptive writing.I felt transported to the scene you created so vividly.well done, Gary.
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Gary Radice
Date: 3/11/2021 11:55:00 PM
Thanks Geoffrey. I was slightly hesitant at first to use sound thinking that words themselves should do all the work but as an experiment I do think the sound lends that extra depth to it all.
Date: 2/20/2021 8:39:00 AM
Very cool sound effects! Puts you right there. God bless ya, Gary!
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/20/2021 12:11:00 PM
Thank you Kim for your visit and lovely comments. Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/19/2021 12:31:00 PM
Heya Gary, your poem is fantastic on its own, but the background sound, gives an extra tangible 3D quality, puts you right at the center of the picture portrayed, great formatting, cheers David
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/19/2021 12:47:00 PM
Thanks David. Finally I'm happy with it. I've removed verses from the original and chopped and changed..I'd like to try this with a couple of older poems but not go overboard with things. Cheers for your valued comments - Gary
Date: 2/18/2021 2:26:00 PM
Gary, the result of listen to poem works great, loved the sound effects with your wonderfully written poem, are you happy with it ? _Constance
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/18/2021 2:52:00 PM
Thanks Constance. I really like the sound but have been tweaking the words and verses of the original on and off all night to fit the sound a little better..If I'm honest I much prefer the original poem (it was longer and read much better in my opinion) but yes, Im very happy with the background sound on this. Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/18/2021 12:42:00 PM
Well-done, Gary!:-) Quite a fantastic poem. I enjoyed the read. The sound effects definitely put readers "there."
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/18/2021 12:51:00 PM
Thank you Edward! :) It's made me think about the possibility of revisiting a couple of older poems just to add some sound effects to them :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/18/2021 11:08:00 AM
You've made a great start to your experiment in adding sound Gary, straight away it transports the reader to the seaside, the sound of the sea and the seagulls is such a soothing sound. Tom
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/18/2021 11:17:00 AM
Thanks Tom. It's very early days but I'm happy how it worked out. Thanks for all your advice too, it's very much appreciated. Cheers - Gary