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Two Dancers - Dali

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we're not there, we're on the wire spin and twirl though never tire absent yet entwined and spun as now we are all but one trace my arm I'll tilt to see chaos calmer guiding me evaporate my daily woes lift me up away from lows and as thought bubbles begin to pop rhyme and reason slows to a stop lingering gift remains opaque something that could never break a shadow that holds my hand observes me whirl but understands whispers so I'll always know I'm both the stillness and the flow held me tightly then let me go

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I Am Anaya

Date: 3/7/2025 8:44:00 AM

Graceful unrest, rhyme ex·tra·or·di·naire! ha had to look up the word! Paula has a keen eye for detail, she mentioned the whirling dervishes continuing into your lines of thought. Congratulations on your top win Dilly! ~

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/7/2025 8:53:00 AM

This drawing was a delight to discover on a slow poetry day for me and I must have got one of Brian's last places with my dream spun write just before I went to sleep. It was a lovely surprise to place. Glad you liked it :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/7/2025 8:20:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative write with a great picture and ending.... Looks like your pen also did the picture. So Wonderful... Have a fun/blessed weekend as you write away.........

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/7/2025 8:48:00 AM

Haha thanks Paula - poets always go beyond the edge of the page every now and again I'm sure :) thanks for your kind words

Ink Empress

Date: 3/7/2025 5:17:00 AM

Oh that ending is so clever dear dd, and this piece of art is so impressive! I cant even imagine how he must have done it, and your words depict it so well especially the presentation, of words, the ending is so good! I am both the stillness and flow too. And i love how you've written "absent yet entwined and spun as now we are all but one"'the depth there! This is truly such a brilliant poem! I cant even! I dunno how you come up with these! Congratulations on your win! Well deserved.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/7/2025 7:08:00 AM

He can't help but have been smug drawing that I imagine, it really is beautiful, one of the few pictures I write about I'd be happy to own. Your high praise of my words is a real joy, thank you :)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/7/2025 12:42:00 AM

Brilliant DD, you rock with rhyming verse, congratulations on top win:)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/7/2025 2:27:00 AM

Hurray! Thanks for letting me know about my placement in Brian's contest :) I appreciate you stopping by with kind words, very much valued x

Sand Blown

Date: 3/6/2025 4:10:00 PM

...wowza....'two, dancers.....on the wire ....chaos calmer...thought bubbles rhyme.....reason held me tightly...... me go'.......excellente' theme........len

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/6/2025 11:06:00 PM

Thank you Len, I was quite sleepy writing this one and I think the half dream might have been swept up with the words. I was delighted to have a finished poem and even more delighted to see this morning it had been enjoyed, thank you

Lin Lane

Date: 3/6/2025 3:31:00 PM

Dilly, the cadence of your lines when I read them aloud, made the rhythm of the dance seem to come alive. Your final verse uses the perfect words to acknowledge the dance slows. “I’m both the stillness and the flow…” as if thanking the artist for the dance ;-)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/6/2025 11:01:00 PM

Thanks Lin, I'd never seen the drawing before and it is quite lovely. None of the days attempts at writing had resulted in a full poem, so I pushed myself to have another go (to confirm to myself I hadn't forgotten how). Wouldn't it be lovely to hear other poets read our poems from time to time :) I think I'd enjoy that - like something I made truly existing by being spoken by another. Thank you for your kind review - lovely to wake up to

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 3/6/2025 2:53:00 PM

I like this picture. It looks like his pen started to twirl and just wouldn't stop. Was he showing off? I've always liked Dali.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/6/2025 11:03:00 PM

No doubt he was Hilda, maybe we all would if we had such a party trick (haha I'm wondering if we'd all twirl our moustaches if we had them now though lol)