Proserpina

through the lambent rain of memory secrets tumble under water locks of hair halo flowers coral blooms darkest deep purgatory pulls whispers of thread piercing skin weaving mind and body together form and essence divided no more but reconceived within floating seeds garden linger those particles of light, oh lord! thrashing to life the pounding of wings

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Silent One

Date: 12/21/2023 1:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the nonet contesttpb

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/21/2023 3:06:00 PM

thank you

Ink Empress

Date: 12/21/2023 8:25:00 AM

Your way with weaving words truly is exquisite and very catchy and unique, has an originality that i truly admire and am in awe of. I especially loved “ secrets tumble under water locks of hair halo flowers coral blooms darkest deep” so creative how you describe things. And the flow is seamless. Congratulations on your win

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/21/2023 8:46:00 AM

my gratitude

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/19/2023 4:08:00 PM

outstanding Nonet! The first line engaged me instantly--lambent rain of memory was a wonderful image! I also liked: purgatory pulls whispers of thread Magnificent! have a great evening, Sara

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/19/2023 8:11:00 PM

your kind words resonate with me

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/19/2023 6:42:00 AM

Mat, your Nonet, has been exquisitely created. The initial line serves as an enticing call into a world brimming with vibrant creativity. Your judicious and unique choice of words is truly excellent.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/19/2023 7:48:00 AM

a kind thank you

Di11y Da11y

Date: 12/18/2023 3:16:00 PM

This is wonderful! It swallowed me up, a few words I need to look up in there but just beautiful imagery and word choices. I love that there's so many word combinations I've never seen before that look so perfect and right - creating both atmosphere and experience.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/18/2023 7:03:00 PM

thank you for the gracious comment -

Christina Bowring

Date: 12/18/2023 2:15:00 PM

A very well written Nonet Mat. The opening line is captivating. Great choice of creative words, ’secrets tumble under water’. Enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you :):)

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/18/2023 7:02:00 PM

thank you and my deepest gratitude

Silent One

Date: 12/18/2023 1:22:00 PM

You did this form very well..

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/18/2023 7:01:00 PM

thank you for the time

Chetta Achara

Date: 12/17/2023 5:35:00 PM

Very nice. It echoes the mythology.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/17/2023 5:41:00 PM

thank you for reading