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Occam's Razor

It enters uninvited like the silence that suffers between mountains just there - before the dawn holding the darkness in the weight of raw space it enters uninvited impressing upon me the heaviness of the sea hungry sheens of madness swallowing sound into verdant bliss beneath the twisting glass it enters uninvited in like a bullet sweeping hair into tangles of cold fire the pantheon of solitude under deep stones heavy as a prayer still - it enters uninvited eating words ink and water translucent in the mind’s sky particles of blue protest the oblivion and all that is dust by god! therein

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Date: 12/28/2024 11:19:00 PM
This is such a brilliant poem woven with such exquisite metaphors and wordplay that truly is impeccable! I love so many lines in this and the refrain too is catchy, but the ending with lines “ eating words ink and water translucent in the mind’s sky particles of blue protest the oblivion ” stands out the most for me! Excellent! Absolutely loved the depth of this! Sending you light always
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/30/2024 6:40:00 PM
i am always grateful to you for your kind words and insights - sending light back
Date: 12/28/2024 5:19:00 PM
I also think that artists are going to lose something, going AI. How such an amazing job you did portraying it - "twisting glass " "protest the oblivion and all that is dust by god! therein " - dark and beautiful, and dark seems so true in this
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/28/2024 8:16:00 PM
thank you for visiting and taking the time - kindest wishes

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