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Nightmare

"You are welcomed to your room at night, everything is in the same familiar place. It's been long day. Climbing in to your comfy bed. Switching off the light. Nothing bad can happen"
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Anything can incite the beginning Because the nightmare lurks and skulks and sneers Clock ticks and tocks Don't think about staying awake Everything you do brings it one breath closer Forget the day, this is the night Grabbed by the dark at every blink of your eyelids Have you woken or are you sleeping? Inescapable dreamland Jolt awake Kafkaesque visions flickering into view Leap out of bed, quickly clamber back in Midnight lollops past, unsoothingly Nictitating membrane, can't see shhh! Opaque, shadowy, engulfing shapes dissipate Piecing fragments together Question your surroundings, your sanity Resolve to avoid the thoughts, it's ok Safely drifting off, sliding, succumb to sleep Taken,snatched in! Undulations of rest. and startles. Vanishing strength, leaden weight, sleep Wake up! Xerographical visions print black on black You don't know if your eyes are open or closed Zzzzzap! GOT YOU. Grabbed and held in the NIGHTMARE................... ................................. ........................... ............................. ....................... .............. ...... .... .. . Writing Challenge - 'N' Words - Poetry Contest 22nd March 2023 Sponsored by: Constance La France 1st place

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Date: 5/4/2023 5:49:00 PM
Dear Dilly, your poem is a powerful, ominous creative waterfall of thought-provoking and visceral imagery. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Constance's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/4/2023 10:41:00 PM
Thank you Susan - I did get very carried away with this one. Thank you for your kind words :)
Date: 5/2/2023 2:07:00 PM
This is excellent, the in between limbo nightmare, this is where I get that weird falling jolt. Not sure if you saw but this is high up on the top 100 new poems also, well done!! a fave for me
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Date: 5/2/2023 2:16:00 PM
Aww thanks H. I hadn't noticed. I'll have a look and see. Glad you like it, I did feel on a roll with this one. I think working through the alphabet can provide a sense of accomplishment (as long as you start with a plan for x!) Thank you for your kind words :)
Date: 3/26/2023 1:07:00 PM
Dilly, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge 'N' Words, wonderful writing, very creative and I like your quote also, blessings, Constance
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Date: 3/26/2023 1:38:00 PM
Thank you so much, it was a great prompt :)
Date: 3/26/2023 12:14:00 AM
In fitful sleep, we often get nightmares. Horrific scenes and scary sights flash past our eyes. Unfortunately we think they are real. Perfect one DD. Congratulations on your top win.
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Date: 3/26/2023 12:17:00 AM
Thank you Valsa, it's lovely to have you back
Date: 3/24/2023 1:45:00 PM
A frightmare of a nightmare Dilly, spine-chilling. Congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest with this excellent write… Belle
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Date: 3/24/2023 2:20:00 PM
Thanks Belle :)
Date: 3/24/2023 11:17:00 AM
- A horrible nightmare, D.D. ... congratulations on your top win :) - hugs
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Date: 3/24/2023 11:20:00 AM
Haha thanks - just think, this was just the bit before the nightmare started! Thanks for your kind words :)
Date: 3/24/2023 9:32:00 AM
That is one scary nightmare you describe! Fun to read, thinking I hope I don't have one of these! Congratulations on top first!
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Date: 3/24/2023 9:52:00 AM
Thanks Ann, morning always comes around :) thank you for your kind words
Date: 3/24/2023 9:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Wow!!! What a write/quote. Have a blessed day/weekend.................
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Date: 3/24/2023 9:14:00 AM
Thank you Paula, 3 exclamation marks good? I'll take that! :)
Date: 3/24/2023 6:07:00 AM
Congratulations! Yet again I learned a new word just reading your work! Nicitating membrane has such an incredible mouthfeel and looks almost ominous on the page - it adds so much to the tone of your poem... all of your word choices do. Well done!!
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Date: 3/24/2023 6:17:00 AM
I have to say I was also delighted when I slotted that one in! Not only is the word menacing in itself but the actuality of opening your eyes and them still being obscured by another eyelid is way OTT on the creep outs! Thank you for your support!
Date: 3/23/2023 7:28:00 PM
Well the apple is tastin pretty good. I told you the fine tuning was fine ! Congrats.
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Date: 3/24/2023 12:05:00 AM
Haha thanks Wen, looks like yours was tailored just fine too - congratulations back at you :)
Date: 3/23/2023 7:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win in this contest. Dilly. Wonderful writting .
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Date: 3/24/2023 12:04:00 AM
Thank you :) glad you liked it
Date: 3/23/2023 6:45:00 PM
What an original write! Enjoyed the read, from start to finish. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 3/24/2023 12:04:00 AM
Thank you very much! Congratulations also on your win:)
Date: 3/22/2023 10:52:00 AM
Wow, what a piece of work!! Amazing! I am going to fav it!
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Date: 3/22/2023 10:56:00 AM
Thanks Paige! I might keep my fingers crossed for this one then. Thank you for your kind words :)
Date: 3/21/2023 9:53:00 PM
OK the fine tuning is excellent. I still adore the way midnight lollops past. I could read it without stopping this time because I already knew what Kafkaesque meant, Its a winner DD. You did well. I don't think it could possibly be better. Everything is just right for a very disturbing read.
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Date: 3/22/2023 7:18:00 AM
Thanks Wen, we shall see - I'm the apple of your eye at the moment haha!
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Date: 3/21/2023 11:02:00 PM
Thank you, I'll ensure I fine tune only then :)
Date: 3/21/2023 9:50:00 PM
Ok that has to get a favourite ! I am exhausted, just reading it. My heart is pounding. Luckily I had to pause my nightmare to go and google Kafkaesque, almost afraid to continue, I braved going back to finish it. Well done DD.. Much worse than reading There's monster at the end of this book.
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Date: 3/21/2023 11:02:00 PM
Haha Wen! Thanks - it's a topic I know a fair bit about. (Although the kafkaesque I discovered yesterday also whilst looking up words that would work hehe)
Date: 3/21/2023 2:57:00 PM
The pivotal moment when you realize your eyelids are your own worst enemy. I hope that sharing it helps you find the rest you deserve! Solemnly A.S.
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Date: 3/21/2023 3:10:00 PM
Lucky this is just prep for contest :) (on this occasion!)

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