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my senryu poetry must suck

silent words cascade unseen, unheard, fade away— lonely ink weeps dreams words fall like dead leaves no hand stirs to hold their weight— autumn of the soul untouched art cries out silent beauty lost to void— a poet unseen

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 4/23/2025 10:25:00 AM

Mickey, i have seen many poets unclear on this form, why is it? Nobody corrects them? Its a form I feel lost im… The Monokus are even worse, they have strict guidelines. People brealk the rules on them almost always, but I have yet to see a poet, correct. When a correction is for.. so they go on and on because they’re easy. But if you know the truth, they are not easy.. pangie

Mickey Grubb
Date: 4/23/2025 2:15:00 PM

True. Thanks for your comments.

Tom Woody

Date: 4/16/2025 2:06:00 PM

Hey Mickey nice senryus. Have a great week. PS. It takes some time to build a following on PS. Some never do

Mickey Grubb
Date: 4/16/2025 3:32:00 PM

Yep, senryu...my bad. Thanks for checking in and reading the post. A heartfelt thank you.

Lin Lane

Date: 4/16/2025 12:50:00 PM

Mickey, your title certainly didn't suck because it got my attention, thinking, "How bad can this guy's Haiku be?" Actually, they're not Haiku. They're considered Senryu since they've been humanized with the mention of words, hands and a poet. So, I'll say your Senryu do not suck. lol Also, don't capitalize words unless it's a proper noun. I apologize if my comments offend you. Just wanted to offer my thoughts.

Mickey Grubb
Date: 4/16/2025 3:50:00 PM

Hi Lin, I should have caught the senryu mishap because of the points you mentioned and the focus on human emotions. As for the capitalization, I should adhere to traditional Japanese form instead of leaning on my English adaptations. Thanks for your kind review, and you certainly have not offended me in any way. I have learned an important lesson. Much love--Mickey G