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My Bloody Valentine Contest

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For Sara Jama's My Bloody Valentine Contest. Written using Paul Cezanne "The Strangled Woman" as inspiration.

aches of intent trample my heart battered by a passion that tore me apart callous are games accidentally wrought deliberate, the battle that cannot be fought evidence spills from my lips as lucidity hits followed by confusion as the thought sits going nowhere confuses the soul heavy dread on repeat takes its toll I matter, dead or alive jeopardy real as I lose the urge to strive karma kicks back on past micro escapes leadens the air to re-breathe as mistakes make believe sanity skips an MOT nothing is coming to rescue me others watch on with blind eyes to you pathetic amnesia, I forget again what I knew quiet the tornado, I'll rest in the lulls respite removed, indiscriminate culls saved in a moment by shreds of praise tell me I'm precious amidst the haze unclear if I still know how to exist vanishing quickly in dissociative mist what now - just around again? xenon flickering in dimly lit brain yesterday forgotten, it's easier that way zombified and doe eyed on Valentine's Day

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/12/2025 6:53:00 AM

Dear DD, your abecedarian hits with such raw, unfiltered emotion. I can feel the weight of every line, the battle between clarity and confusion, the desire for reprieve amidst the chaos. It’s both haunting and beautiful, like a heart laid bare. You’ve captured that essence of inner turmoil so well, leaving me reflecting on its depth. Good Luck in the Contest. Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/12/2025 9:51:00 AM

Thank you so much Daniel, I'm enjoying getting back into the contest writes. It draws something different out when required to write on a theme. Thank you for your kind and insightful appraisal, appreciated

Ink Empress

Date: 2/12/2025 5:19:00 AM

Whoa, you did an abcedarian for the contest! How clever! And i love the fact that your lines rhyme throughout, and the cadence of this dark and deep poem left me singing your words woven in such a lyrical manner. And i especially love "tell me I'm precious amidst the haze unclear if I still know how to exist vanishing quickly in dissociative mist" just impeccable! One of the best iv read for this prompt i must say! Just love it! And the artwork youv used as inspiration is so good! I think this poem will do really best! Best wishes! Sending you light always

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/12/2025 9:49:00 AM

Thank you for much Ink. I really enjoyed Sara's last contest, so wanted to put the effort in for this one also. I quite like an abecedarian - the letter prompts kind of steer the poem. Painting is rather dark - the other one I did on Cezanne was perspective of apples. Thank you for your kind words, they mean a lot x

David Kavanagh

Date: 2/11/2025 2:46:00 PM

Wowza! an abecedarian and a half Dilly, well not quite, but you did get through the whole alphabet at least once which is plenty:), A physical and psychological strangulation of the senses, I matter dead or alive, the fight back begins again, after forgetting what you knew, your poem paints an overall sorry state of eternal recurrence, what now just around again, last line is genius, and somehow resolves the paradox, brilliant as always, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/11/2025 3:11:00 PM

Haha "it's messed up genius!" get that line on the cover of my never to be written book :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/11/2025 3:05:00 PM

I don’t think if you went through the whole alphabet 100 times you’d have finished on a better Z line, it’s messed up genius!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/11/2025 2:58:00 PM

Haha an abecedarian and a half could be a new form, as long as the extra half doesn't have another x, y, z in it! Thank you for your enthused review - quite a tricky contest prompt this one, so brought in a collaborator in the form of a painter :) having only seen Cezanne's still life I was surprised by this earlier work. Thanks again :)