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Memento on the Moon

the glaze of my gaze is shattered by my own hand, the contents stolen so, it is both a lie and the truth when I tell you that I have nothing I leave you the art of this emptiness both you and I, by design, destined to yearn the void ~ a masterpiece of obsession an illusion of rapture that waxes and wanes resisting any real break from orbit the fathoms of our intoxicating fever dream become somehow for sale yet the ownership of this space between us always falls back into our hands with a higher price paid, every time for not ever fully letting it go

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Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/24/2025 3:50:00 PM

You have a unique style of "being" the poem. Even in an Ekphrasis, which one expects it to be about the art, you make it about you. Your feelings your actions, your ideas, your perception. Such a talent D. I dont think anyone on Soup even attempts to do it. You really take ownership of everything you write. This is just another example of your standout ability. Well deserved trophy.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/25/2025 6:48:00 AM

So kind Wen, thank you :) I think a self taught style means I kind of forgot about the typical requirement of describing the art and moved into feeling it. Thank you so much for the high praise, I'm thrilled with the trophy :)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 4/24/2025 8:05:00 AM

Outstanding piece here, DD. Congratulations on first win. Well-deserved.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/24/2025 8:11:00 AM

Thank you Edward, I appreciate you stopping by with encouraging words :)

David Kavanagh

Date: 4/23/2025 8:33:00 AM

Back with big congratulations Dilly, your skill as a top poet here on the soup is so evident the way you put yourself into and become the poem itself, brilliant, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/23/2025 8:54:00 AM

Thank you for your repeat visit David :) I'm so delighted with this trophy, a lesson to me to have faith and indeed enjoy the process regardless. I did fret a little when I first posted in case it was wide of the mark and appreciated your kind encouraging words then too :)

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 4/23/2025 7:25:00 AM

Brilliant! Well deserved trophy win, DD ~ congratulations!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/23/2025 8:47:00 AM

Thank you so much Seeker, I'm honoured by your kind words x

Ink Empress

Date: 4/23/2025 3:07:00 AM

Omg!!! Wow! Im so happy to see you receive 1st!!! Congratulations on your trophy win! Well deserved dear DD! You are the queen of ekphrasis!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/23/2025 6:27:00 AM

Aww Ink, you're so kind! Thank you for having faith in this poem when I posted and sharing your encouraging words (plus the one word I claimed! Lol). It means so much x

Suzette Richards

Date: 4/23/2025 2:58:00 AM

Light and airy like an English sponge – my favourite. The age old philosophical debate about when is nothing actually also something, appealed to me. The oblique reference to a framed blank canvas that sold for an astronomical amount of money, lent a refreshing slant to this well crafted poem. Some things money can’t buy: ‘ both you and I, by design, destined to yearn’. The significance to you as poet is cleverly defined as the void is something universally experienced. The skilful use of metaphor and contrasting elements balanced well with the subject of your poem where you explored the emotional weight of the situation, and honoured the brief of a memento on the moon in a Notional Ekphrasis. Congratulations on your trophy win, Di11y Da11y.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/23/2025 6:25:00 AM

Thank you so much Suzette! I was so surprised to see my poem as #1! It's hard to know what will translate when working with abstract ideas and have to trust the reader to exist in the spaces of the poem. I enjoyed the contest so much though, that I was happy just participating (strange but true!). This was such an enjoyable prompt once I'd got my head round it. Thank you again, I'm delighted x

David Kavanagh

Date: 4/22/2025 1:20:00 AM

I’ve always been intrigued by the moon and its tidally locked orbit, (synchronous rotation)! Love your opening line here, sets the tone for the whole piece, your soul searching human metaphors for interactive physics works beautifully, and creates a raw hopeless sense of chemistry, leading to a brilliant finale, sometimes letting go is just out of reach, all the best in contest, cheers David!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/22/2025 7:37:00 AM

You really do elevate a poem and the poet when you step into the comments box David :) I feel delightfully intelligent just hearing of my accomplishments here :) I'm glad the science parallels match up to the concept of art and emotion I've used. I always fear I perhaps steal ideas from paintings, so it was quite fun to have a notional ekphrasis and for the concept to be absence of anything tangible at all - yet still have a poem that conjures the sense of it. Thank you for your valued commentary which adds an extra dimension :)

Ink Empress

Date: 4/21/2025 7:23:00 AM

Dear DD, You have that evocative touch to your word weaving here, and the opening line with " glass of gaze" really stood out for me! Impressive opening line and the rest with lines such as "I leave you the art of this emptiness both you and I, by design, destined to yearn" gosh my heart, i can feel the longing! I love also fever dream and the ending! So much has been conveyed here , it truly is soul stirring and a fave for me! I think you dont need me to wish you luck as youve nailed it! Your way with painting imagery and expressing is so heart touching! This prompt is really inspiring! And i see you inspired! Sending you light always

Ink Empress
Date: 4/21/2025 10:55:00 AM

Wow glaze actually works better haha! Autocorrect knows well! I think now its good to go! I will have a look at your previously posted poem too. Goodluck for the contest

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/21/2025 8:45:00 AM

Well glaze of gaze is finding it's way into the final edit! I had glass :) I was very much inspired by the invisible art that gets sold. Just the evocation of a feeling being purchased, an empty plinth with an artist who projected the conception of it. It makes you wonder whether there is something present. I wrote about one before https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/invisible_sculpture_-_salvatore_garau_1646850. I'm delighted with the fave for this experimental one and your kind words. It may still get tweaked before it closes as I've really enjoyed writing for this prompt. Maybe I'll try and glimpse the moon during the edit :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/20/2025 11:07:00 AM

The art of emptiness and the crescent moon, so beautiful, the moon if we think about seems empty, a void, yet part of world purpose. can't wait for the rest . ~ Easter blessings

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/20/2025 11:41:00 AM

I might play around with a couple of words or the layout but the content will remain in the lack of it. I was thinking of the invisible art concept that sold for thousands. Thanks for your comment.