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Magnification

close up, everything is in scope those minerals facilitating electrical charges what component could I remove should I... identify my point of error so close up that it all becomes clear take the tweezers to my mind pick out the failings place them under a microscope tell me why I don't work as I should analyse me Mr Scientist, I trust you implicitly

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Speaks Volumes

Date: 11/22/2023 10:20:00 AM

I thought for ages, confident I could seek a justifiable angle to approach this contest, and came up with nothing. You have done it so very well. This is a real contender D because it fits exactly to what I imagine the contest requires. Well done.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 11/21/2023 10:33:00 PM

Our temperamental brains sometimes do need outside help. It might just be advice from a friend. I'd be careful with the tweezers, though.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/21/2023 10:59:00 PM

Haha good advice there Hilda - I might actually read through this experiments remit... :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/21/2023 3:28:00 PM

what a clever write, Di11y! Your pleadings to the scientist struck a chord with me...'pick out my failings..place them under a microscope.' The title was perfect as was the flow of your poem. Wonderfully done, have a great evening, Sara