Jellyfish

Darkness - cast in deepest water chasm mad And in blackest net clutch Lingering bubbles of photon flutter errant blunderings of light escape jellyfish scarlet sight negate dead ship dancing flick and shiver laughing, tendrils lash and quiver from Mariana Trench deliver messages to the sun ~

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/10/2024 6:56:00 PM

Ditto Jeanette's comment below about the verbs at the end of the line. It works really well. Great write, Mat!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/11/2024 10:55:00 AM

Thank you wolf

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/10/2024 4:07:00 PM

exquisite is the first word that comes to mind as I read your poem. Captivating is the next word...your poem was captivating; I enjoyed the read!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/11/2024 10:55:00 AM

My appreciation sara

Paige Hind

Date: 2/10/2024 1:44:00 PM

Such an unusual poem, Mat. It's so very darkly beautiful. A pleasure to read.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/10/2024 3:34:00 PM

My appreciation paige

Jeanette Swan

Date: 2/10/2024 3:59:00 AM

I like your poem and choice of topic - this lively jellyfish from the deep. I like how you placed verbs at the end of most lines to highlight the energy of the creature, The poem captures an image.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/10/2024 3:33:00 PM

Thank you for reading