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I Wish I Was An Octopus

I wish I was an octopus, Way down in the depths of the sea, With suckers so comical, face diabolical, Kooky as kooky can be! Hurray! Hurray! I’d be jetting away! As I flunged through the shimbly sea, Confounding all others by changing my colours, An octopus’ life for me! A cephalopod who looks awfully odd, A freak with a beak, tee hee! I’d never more moan, “ooh, the pain in me bones!” Cos I’d be an invertebrate, see! Hurray! Hurray! I’d be wafting away! As I flooped through wurgly sea, Squeezing through cracks with a curious knack, An octopus’ life for me! If you crossed me, I think I would squirt you with ink, How I’d laugh as you scarpered from me! I’d be sly, I’d be smart, but I’d have a great heart, No - better than that... I’d have three! Hurray! Hurray! I’d be creeping away, As I scrundled down deep in the sea, I’d not hunger for much - for I’d taste all I touched! An octopus’ life for me! Us humans are gringey, our lives dull and dingy, What cloddery beings we be! I’d rather be flexible, waving my tentacles, Flubbering curiously! Hurray! Hurray! I’m dreaming away, Of a life in the glorpical sea, As a creature of splendour, a freak show contender, An octopus’ life for me!
3rd May 2018 For Viv Wigley’s Contest “I wish I was a...” 1st Place

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Date: 1/11/2020 11:53:00 PM
Love this. (Stumbled onto it by chance. Glad I did!)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 1/12/2020 1:07:00 AM
Thanks Eric! It’s one of my favourites I’ve written too. :-) Appreciate the comment!
Date: 8/19/2019 5:40:00 PM
I see you have a 1st with this, NIna. Well deserved with this wonderful piece of humour and rhyme. Definitely a +Fav. // Barry
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Barry Stebbings
Date: 8/20/2019 3:13:00 AM
I came across it by accident as I was just browsing, possibly from the notes and photos on the side of the page. // Barry.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 8/20/2019 1:24:00 AM
Thank you Barry! Very kind. I wonder why people are finding this “oldie” this week. Is it on the home page?
Date: 8/17/2019 8:53:00 AM
As soon as I read this I knew why you took first place Nina!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 8/17/2019 10:03:00 AM
Aw so nice to know this is getting read - it may well be my favourite poem of mine ever!!
Date: 1/15/2019 12:15:00 PM
That's fun poetry. Congratulations and keep lighting up our hearts.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 1/15/2019 12:17:00 PM
Ah thank you Frances! Lovely thing to say :-D
Date: 12/19/2018 3:34:00 PM
Absolutely FABULOUS! A fave for me. I love your special words" shimbly, wurgly, gringey, cloddery, flubbery and glorpical" they leave me loverly!
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Timothy McGuire
Date: 12/19/2018 9:53:00 PM
some poems are a struggle and we work on them for a while and every once in a while a concept and a complete poem appears in our minds quickly. Its the mystery and power of words
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 12/19/2018 3:42:00 PM
Thank you so much Timothy! I love it when an old one gets some attention and I’m glad you enjoyed the silly words. I remember having the idea for this one on my way to work one morning, completely out of the blue. Why I was thinking about octopuses on my way to work I have NO idea. :-)
Date: 11/4/2018 6:35:00 PM
This is very cool! Congratulations!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 11/5/2018 12:07:00 AM
Thank you PS! Always nice when an older poem gets some attention :-) Nina
Date: 6/27/2018 6:40:00 AM
This is fantastic Nina. There's some wonderful imagery and a great rhyming scheme which kids and adults can both enjoy.
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Date: 5/9/2018 10:44:00 PM
Creative and energetic write! Congratulations, Nina!
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Date: 5/8/2018 2:45:00 PM
Nina, this is fantastic! Congrats on your top win!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/8/2018 3:15:00 PM
Ah thank you Agnes :-)
Date: 5/8/2018 11:50:00 AM
Nina,congratulations on your creative winning write. hugs
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/8/2018 3:15:00 PM
Thank you Eve! Just fancied doing something a bit different... I should be different more often I reckon!
Date: 5/7/2018 8:04:00 PM
Congrats, Nina! I really like the next to last verse!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/8/2018 3:14:00 PM
Thank you Kim!
Date: 5/7/2018 5:15:00 PM
and I called it!!! Such a well deserved placement, Nina!! BRAVO
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/8/2018 3:13:00 PM
Thank you Andrea, I’m thrilled to win Viv’s contest :-D
Date: 5/7/2018 12:31:00 PM
Told you it was brilliant!!! many congrats Nina:-) hugs jan xx
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/8/2018 3:12:00 PM
Aw thanks Jan!
Date: 5/7/2018 11:20:00 AM
LOL - what a a gloriously entertaining poem. A fabulous whimsical write most deserving of a gold medal. Congrats, Nina. Bravo.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 11:22:00 AM
Thank you very much indeed Line, I love a bit of whimsy ! :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 11:09:00 AM
Wow, you'd better dust the mantelpiece for another trophy, well done Nina. Tom.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 11:17:00 AM
Thank you Tom, very kind:-) unfortunately my mantelpiece is cluttered enough as it is (and not with trophies for anything sadly!!)
Date: 5/7/2018 9:54:00 AM
Nina. Not only is this a trophy win, it's a FAVE for me too. Remarkable, riotous romp. Thanks for taking us Soupers along for a wild ride. Yeah, Nina! :) gw
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 10:45:00 AM
Woohoo! Scream if you wanna go faster! Thank you Gershon, your comment is very much appreciated.
Date: 5/7/2018 9:54:00 AM
This is TOP NOTCH FUN !! Well done, Nina !! A big congrats to you.....well deserved !!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 10:44:00 AM
Thank you so much Carrie, “top notch fun” is a noble purpose! :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 8:40:00 AM
Hi Nina, just swinging back with BIG Congrats for your awesome TOP win! Hugs. Pandita
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 10:43:00 AM
Aw thank you Pandora, much appreciated!
Date: 5/7/2018 8:07:00 AM
Lol! Congratulations on your top win. It was very entertaining and well written. You never know it may go "viral" like Viv suggested:-) Alexis
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 10:42:00 AM
Thank you so much Alexis!
Date: 5/7/2018 7:57:00 AM
So much fun! Giggles galore :) LOVE IT! Congratulations on giddy gold! xomo!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 10:40:00 AM
Thank you so much Maureen :-) I do feel a bit giddy today - must be the heat ;-)
Date: 5/7/2018 5:53:00 AM
Lol. Congratulations on your #1 win with this delightful "I Wish I Was..." This is well written, cleverly crafted. Awesome, Nina. :)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 6:58:00 AM
Thank you very much Susan :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 3:02:00 AM
Congratulations, Nina on your first place win. fabulous poem indeed.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 6:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Subimal!
Date: 5/7/2018 12:31:00 AM
Absolute genius, Nina, I'm in awe. This needs to go viral, it really does. Congrats on your first, and for entering my humble contest. Oh, and thanks for producing a faveable poem. Viv x
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/7/2018 6:57:00 AM
Aw thank you for the lovely comment Viv - and for the inspiration!
Date: 5/6/2018 9:01:00 PM
I want to join your octopus band Nina. Whimsical and fun!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 5/6/2018 11:51:00 PM
And you placed number one! Good for you, my friend! Good for you!
Date: 5/5/2018 10:33:00 PM
I just love this! You had me singing my way through it and smiling, Nina. So imaginative and a pleasure for sure. All the best in the contest! :) ~ Artsie
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/6/2018 3:03:00 AM
Glad it got you singing! Please spend the rest of the day singing “hurray! hurray!” - and add in some flungeing and flooping if you wish ;-)
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