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I miss you my mom

A special poem for my friend, Hassan, who has recently lost his mother at the age of 15 ,may God gives him and his family the power to stand by it and lives his life happily the eyes shed tears my heart is full of everytype of fear I m totally alone without your presence I want you to be near without you who s going to protect me who s going to give confidence to me who s going to scold me I wake up at night waiting for your soft touch which was once the medicine of my worse nightmare the thought of you aren t near fills my inside out with tears I don t show it that way but I care for you I don t tell it that way But I m afraid of dark whenever dad beats me, shout loudly at me I don t show it that way,I don t tell him But my whole body got blenched I wait for you to come and protect me but you never arrived I didn t let it come on my face, but I never stop dazing in my heart I miss you everyday you know everything you know everything your death has left me boundries of pain my eyes leave tears like Srilankan heavy rain don t leave me like this in a bunch of crowd that I don t even able to find my way back to my house don t send me too far that I don t even seem to remember you I m I that bad?,I m I that bad?

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Date: 8/28/2018 3:07:00 AM
a sorrowful, emotional poem...hope he definitely liked it .....but i thought you could have scribbled down words that would calm him as he reads
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Date: 2/28/2018 1:05:00 AM
How nice to have a friend like you to write this poem for him. Thank you for coming to read my The Veil :)
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Date: 2/25/2018 12:47:00 AM
Hassan, is blessed to have a good friend who shares his pain and understands. When loose one we love , mother friend etc by death, or misunderstandings, we suffer the void left. You might enjoy "Saddened" that I wrote for my friend. Keep telling him you love him!..bbn
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Date: 11/17/2017 2:27:00 PM
beautiful write,nice tribute to mom
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Date: 7/5/2017 4:43:00 PM
This is such a pleading, heart-felt poem that I can feel your pain. I am so sorry for your loss. I have two critiques: the line "But my whole body got blenched" - not sure what that means, Perhaps "blenched" is misspelled or not the right word. The other one "your death has left me boundries of pain" - not boundaries. that signifies limits. perhaps you mean "boundless" Nice rhyming and good meter. Keep up the great work.
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Date: 7/3/2017 8:46:00 AM
Faraz it is a beautiful poem filled with emotions. It is indeed great to feel the pain and loss of your friend and potray feelings taking their place! I hope your friend and grief striken family will cheer up soon and may her mothers soul find peace in heaven.
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Date: 6/29/2017 11:28:00 AM
Faraz you are now writing good poems day by day you have done very much good effort and if you'll get suggestions from experienced people's you will be the topper in poetry this poem made me cry I will messege you and give some suggestions about new poem but now move on and live happily I will pray for your friend hassan.
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