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For Suzette's Elements of Nature Contest (I was walking the dog and felt the rain sounded a bit like crackling fire through the trees, so did a quick audio. The birds are audible too but never mind) *** Suzette Swan Arc does not have to be a lengthy verse, it treats verse like a nonlinear conceptual space and aims for a natural sinuous flow, culminating in the signature open-ended finale of the verse. There is no beginning (hook), development or resolution/conclusion commonly associated with poetry forms. The poem should oscillate rather than juxtapose between objective and subjective perception throughout the poem. ***

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flicker/s p a r k s all life is layered here the subtlety of ash to the intolerable heat s sequential is your experience r whereas mine is everything e from the pit m b t o t h e e all at once I take in oxygen only to burn

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thriveni c mysore

Date: 6/14/2025 2:36:00 AM

Oh my! that sure is golden oxygen. beautiful write, Congratulations on your top win dear poet. Three Cheers!!!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 6/14/2025 11:37:00 AM

Thank you Thriveni :)

Suzette Richards

Date: 6/14/2025 12:22:00 AM

Congratulations with your trophy win, DD. You captured the essence of Suzette Swan Arc to a T. The poem’s staggered spatial rhythm effectively mirrors fire’s flickering motion, aligning well with oscillation and nonlinear movement. The closing thought is powerful and let the readers immerse themselves in the pace you have set in your poem. FAVing it. Su

Suzette Richards
Date: 6/14/2025 1:05:00 AM

Intuitive - what it is all about. I am honoured that you have written for my contest - it was not an easy challenge. Have a great weekend. :) Su

Di11y Da11y
Date: 6/14/2025 12:30:00 AM

Thank you Su :) I decided to write my first draft sat next to a speaker playing dance music in a trampoline park. I think bizarrely it helped me not overthink :) it was quite meditative, both to get the words down, then think of the layout (or let the layout think of me - it did feel like I was communing with the poem haha). Thank you so much for my shiny little trophy, I can't help but love those! It's a very pretty form, thanks for the interesting challenge x

Ink Empress

Date: 5/28/2025 9:05:00 AM

Its always interesting to read what inspires a poet to write what they writ and this is so very impressive how you thought of fire listening to the sound of rain! Thats something new and shows how active and creative your mind is dear dd. I am next to write for this contest! And im inspired but your last line in the ekphrasis after reading that im like, ugg i need to beat that line! Cant get over it haha. I absolutely love your take here and presentation too! Best wishes!! Sending you light

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/29/2025 2:44:00 AM

Ahh the audio came second and was a quick on-the-go recording just in case the shape element was hard to read. I was worried this contest was too tricky, but hopefully I've got it right. It was actually tons of fun seeing this one come together. I was in the noisiest place when I wrote it with really loud dance music - I'm surprised I could concentrate at all haha. Haha more than happy to go head to head, our styles are so different that it's a joy to see how you interpret the same prompts :)