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How kind of you to open up my veins,

          With little but his name upon your lips ...

               Eviscerate the warmth of what remains,

     The grief of beauty strangled in your grips.



No more fallacious kisses will we share,

          No longer curious, your stayed replies,

               No mystery, your mess of tousled hair,

     Or yet, the moony fervor in your eyes.



But one thing, yet, will tantalize me so -

          A question that bewilders, you'll agree,

               Is why, with all the time you've had to go,

     You make him wait, to linger here with me?



So, plunge the blade and consecrate your crime ...

          But do it slow, and love me ... one ... last ... time.




Submitted on January 8, 2019
To the "Beautiful Sadness" Poetry Contest
John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 1/19/2019 8:32:00 AM
Enjoyed your poem and just beautifully put.Congratulations on your win.Have a great day!:)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/19/2019 4:46:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Kenisha - that's very kind of you! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/16/2019 7:44:00 AM
I love everything about this one - the perfect meter, the wrenching imagery, and that last haunting line. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
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Date: 1/19/2019 4:45:00 PM
This is such a sweet comment, Heather, and I so appreciate your kind and gracious words! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/16/2019 6:56:00 AM
Greg, you always set the bar so high for the rest of us. Congrats on your trophy win for this beautiful sonnet. The final couplet blew me away. John
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/19/2019 4:44:00 PM
Oh, what a wonderful comment, John, you are as kind as you are eloquent! Blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 1/15/2019 4:23:00 PM
Back again to congratulate you again on this amazing 'beautiful sadness' Sonnet making it to the top of the podium once more, Greg! Another well-deserved win! Sandra :) <3
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Date: 1/19/2019 4:42:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Sandra, I so greatly appreciate it, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/15/2019 12:14:00 PM
Congratulations dear poet <3 xomo
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/19/2019 4:42:00 PM
Thanks so much, Maureen! :-)
Date: 1/15/2019 11:25:00 AM
Oh I love this one Greg - the beauty is sad, the sadness is beautiful, and oh, the pain and the bitterness... well played sir, well played! ;-)
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Date: 1/19/2019 4:41:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Nina, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one! :-) <3
Date: 1/15/2019 11:22:00 AM
This one really packs a punch Greg, really a masterpiece, congrats on another deserved first place!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/19/2019 4:40:00 PM
You are very kind, John, thank you so much for my placement - I am honored! :-)
Date: 7/29/2018 5:06:00 PM
Greg, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem, well done !
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/29/2018 5:12:00 PM
Thank you SO much, Constance, I am so honored and humbled ... I knew this poem was worthy of more than two N/A's, but people like what they like, and you have to roll with the punches in this game, and respect their opinion for being theirs, (though you may not agree). Blessings to you for seeing it's worth, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 7/28/2018 1:40:00 PM
Back to congratulate you again for your win again. Beautiful as always. :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/28/2018 8:02:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Susan, thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3 ~ The Bard
Date: 7/27/2018 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations on your awesome win, Greg . I enjoyed reading this well written sonnet. Hugs Eve
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/28/2018 8:01:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Eve, I greatly appreciate it! :-) <3 ~ The Bard
Date: 7/27/2018 3:09:00 PM
Hooray for you Gregory...that this marvel got the First Class treatment it deserves! As you know it was a fave of mine. I am so happy to see it shine in bright lights! Congratulations! : )
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Date: 7/28/2018 8:01:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Connie, thank you so much! I'm pleased you liked this one, friend! :-) <3 ~ The Bard
Date: 7/27/2018 12:51:00 PM
Wow, I can't believe this didn't place! Phenomenal write, Greg! Loved it.
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Date: 7/28/2018 8:00:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Edward, I greatly appreciate it! :-) ~ The Bard
Date: 7/27/2018 10:30:00 AM
Mind boggling this was N/A in any contest, the fact that it's best new poem proves contest judges don't always get it right...the public has spoken!
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Date: 7/28/2018 7:59:00 PM
Very kind of you, John, and I so appreciate it, my friend! Blessings! :-) ~ The Bard
Date: 7/27/2018 2:32:00 AM
Congratulations Greg... a joy to read this again!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/28/2018 7:58:00 PM
Thank you so much, Nina! :-) <3 ~ The Bard
Date: 7/26/2018 3:51:00 PM
I'm watching Unfaithful right now. With Richard Gere & Diane Lane. Nicely done :)
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Date: 7/28/2018 7:58:00 PM
That's quite ironic, Debbie - wow! And thank you so much! :-) <3 ~ The Bard
Date: 7/6/2018 8:30:00 PM
this...poem... is Awesome! well written, the word choice and the flow of it all.... jealous they weren't my own words. well penned Greg!
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Date: 7/10/2018 9:48:00 PM
That's very kind of you to say, Jesse, and I so greatly appreciate it! Blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/2/2018 1:41:00 PM
Such a beautifully-written poem, Greg! Congratulations on your 1st Place Podium win! Sandra :)
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Date: 7/10/2018 9:46:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Sandra, thank you so much! :-) <3
Date: 7/1/2018 1:38:00 AM
gorgeous as usual, obvious top place - congrats
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Date: 7/2/2018 11:54:00 AM
That's very sweet of you, Virginia - thank you so much! :-) <3
Date: 7/1/2018 1:01:00 AM
Lovely write, Gregory, and those last two lines are mighty fine. Congrats! Regards, Viv
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/2/2018 11:54:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Viv, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it, my friend! :-)
Date: 6/30/2018 8:24:00 AM
Beautiful - no words can add to this. Greatly done.
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Date: 7/2/2018 11:54:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Caren, thank you so very much, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 6/30/2018 7:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your #1 win. A master theme and use of the 8 words! :)
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Date: 7/2/2018 11:53:00 AM
That's very sweet of you, Susan, thank you so very much! :-) <3
Date: 6/30/2018 2:37:00 AM
Great write and win Greg...Congrats
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/30/2018 6:28:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Joseph! :-)
Date: 6/29/2018 6:36:00 PM
Wonderful write Greg, I was thinking that to develop a story line, at least 20 lines were needed. Well what do I know! 12 lines and you nailed it, what an amazing talent sir!
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Date: 6/30/2018 6:28:00 AM
I'm really pleased you found it worthy, John, and honored that it placed so highly - many thanks and blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 6/29/2018 2:24:00 AM
A brilliantly written sonnet, Gregory. You have used the eight words in excellent fashion to create a gem of a poem. Best wishes for the contest. T.J
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/30/2018 6:27:00 AM
That's very kind of you to say, Teppo - thank you so much, friend! :-)
Date: 6/29/2018 1:55:00 AM
YES Greg! YES! And that’s all I have to say about that ;-)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/30/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thanks so much, Nina - THANKS!!
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