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do you feel me

it's whiplash on the regular, as something crosses my eye line then sudden stop, reeling and covered in dust I'm unable to identify or explain it crash, I am so, so sorry on those breezy days, be alert for the snap yet I feel I also open doors to other planes but oh my, some of them hold such a beautiful me slam/I am ejected into abject fear surely unnecessary, I glided through a day not long ago all saw it, didn't you interacted with that me if only there was something to hold me there in 'too good to be true' sanguine positivity where my skin tingles like I'm made of magic no, I do not want to find myself behind the wheel right before/bang an aspirated composite of memories, getting in your lungs you can feel me, I am/was but I am no longer does that explain it I'm all for the happy days simply catching the breeze to rise up then fall

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Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 7/6/2024 1:44:00 AM

very wonderful write! You have a style of your own that is appealing! Well done on the win!! Great Job!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/6/2024 2:41:00 AM

What a lovely thing to say :) thanks Krish, I appreciate that

thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/5/2024 1:59:00 AM

how well written! emotional thoughts sweeps our senses. Congratulations on your win dear poet. Happy writing.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/5/2024 9:46:00 AM

Thank you Thriveni, appreciated

Suzette Richards

Date: 7/5/2024 12:27:00 AM

Congratulations on your 5th place win, DD. Your thought process is unique and the rollercoaster emotions expressed can’t leave the reader indifferent. One would like to zone out, but your words captivate and fascinate, making us understand that even while we interact with one another, true emotions are lurking just below the surface. The final two lines express the personal philosophy of acceptance of the world not always ‘getting you’ – or do I have it wrong?

Suzette Richards
Date: 7/5/2024 3:41:00 AM

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/5/2024 3:09:00 AM

Haha yeah clarification on the 'world not getting me' bit - the world actually seems fine. I just need to give myself a break :)

Suzette Richards
Date: 7/5/2024 2:58:00 AM

That is what I said ... I think :) Nice write.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/5/2024 12:55:00 AM

It's all about the below the surface emotions of anxiety, the sudden dips as it takes hold and tries to convince you you're terrible at everything and should become a hermit for the sake of everyone who might have to endure you... In my case it's nicely offset by very little evidence because I've successfully worked in the same organisation many years recieving promotions from those that work with me and have several solid groups of long standing friends that affirm me all the time. Yet I just can't shake the dread for long... Thanks for my placement x

Mat Ignacio

Date: 6/18/2024 8:31:00 PM

"alert for the snap" - isn't that the truth - well composed here

Di11y Da11y
Date: 6/19/2024 10:15:00 AM

Thanks Mat

Speaks Volumes

Date: 6/18/2024 12:31:00 AM

It reeks of positivity, isn't it supposed to ? You do it yourself, you talk yourself out of fear, That's what I love about it. If you can do it we all can. You pass on a feeling of relief and some how calm from the abrupt jerky tense start. maybe I am weird but it enlightened me. I feel good like somehow you knew I would

Di11y Da11y
Date: 6/18/2024 1:41:00 PM

I've got two drafts now and am in a muddle what to do - may put in a few tweaks. Thanks for the vote of confidence. Glad it gives you the feel good :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 6/17/2024 4:05:00 PM

I've been waiting for your Suzette Prime, yay.

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/18/2024 12:11:00 PM

'abject fear' it holds so many feelings amazing.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 6/17/2024 10:16:00 PM

Thanks Anaya - it was the positivity that was throwing me for this entry! I'm not sure at all if I'm right and might tweak a bit before it closes. I wrote 30 lines, so spent ages trying to cut down. It is a fun challenge though!