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Collaboration with David Kavanagh Regret fuses form which echoes perception Handcuff to water as sought submerged reflection Anti duplicitous from own point of view Rejection offends but that says more about you Transformation on edge, background statuesque Self absorbed in pool, bilocation grotesque Feet disappear, as sacrificial bait The real catch lies behind, not quite checkmate The heterosexuals lurk muttering their vows Unable to fathom their failure to arouse Wider contemplation rests with the herd Obsession with self still a curse I preferred Too good for water, I’ll regenerate inside an egg The hand of god hatches me, as admirers beg I love myself so much, will imbibe my own death A new shoot starts to form, osmosing fresh breath Sand down the edges, map out the plan I'm more than my beauty, more than this man You don't see inside me, an insular plane The answer evades me til I live again And grow I shall, right down through the ages Not always simultaneous, in periodic stages Metamorphosis takes time, to let go of perfection I’m immortal, stunning, a self selection

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Date: 8/4/2024 11:19:00 AM
To keep you hanging, dear Dilly, not intended, was in Calabasas yesterday. First, the entire detailed expression as a whole is a renaissance in its true meaning rebirth. There is evidence in every line of both poets. You have mastered the art of seamless collaboration! I'm aware that you do capitalize God and David doesn't, also your own signature expressions. Brainstorming this collaborative delicacy for the mind, nothing short of brilliant. I know what I'm talking about lol ;)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/4/2024 1:13:00 PM
You have a great eye for detail detective Anaya, (so says your new avatar) I do capitalise God at the start of sentences, and here I even capitalised one mid-sentence for you! Thanks so much for the revisit and very generous comment, we were both delighted with this one cheers David
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Date: 8/4/2024 11:25:00 AM
Reporter! Back to fave, David, Cheers!
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/4/2024 11:22:00 AM
You're a joy Anaya! That capitalisation was indeed an excellent spot for the keen eye, I'm impressed! It wasn't written line by line, so you might have just cracked it haha :)
Date: 8/3/2024 9:44:00 AM
WOW!!! What a Write/Collaboration. Great picture/great ending. Everyone looks at art in a different way. Have a wonderful/blessed day............
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/3/2024 12:12:00 PM
Thank you Paula, I’m delighted you seen the overall picture through both of our eyes, it is a magnificent painting, cheers David
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/3/2024 10:49:00 AM
Thank you for your enthusiasm Paula, glad you enjoyed it x
Date: 8/3/2024 8:55:00 AM
Thanks so much Dilly for posting and for the chance to collaborate with you, attempting to decipher and interpret this Dali masterpiece, was such fun and a real challenge; (on reflection) I hope we managed to give some abstract balance, to his surreal beautiful painting, cheers David
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/3/2024 10:23:00 AM
Thank you David - I thought it would be a project working on this painting but it came together very swiftly. Dali always feels a bit edgier than some other surrealists and I think a touch of that came through as it's quite unavoidable when interpreting his paintings. Thank you - I enjoyed working with you :)
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 8/3/2024 9:44:00 AM
WOW!!! What a Write/Collaboration. Great picture/great ending. Everyone looks at art in a different way. David, I wanted you to know I read this. Have a wonderful/blessed day...................
Date: 8/3/2024 8:39:00 AM
I missed this one. Sensational really gets to the root of Dali's masterpiece. I'll re-read when I get the chance and guess who is whom. Good job guys! xo okay, "Anti duplicitous from own point of view Rejection offends but that says more about you" this one sounds like David? um gotta run, back most def. to this one:)
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Date: 8/3/2024 10:20:00 AM
Keep guessing :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/3/2024 8:48:00 AM
Thanks Anaya - that'll be interesting to see if you can decipher, I'd got into a Dali mindset for writing, might throw you off course haha :)

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