Breezy

A breeze finds me Whispers to me About the expanses of the outside Waiting to welcome me How if I close my eyes Dreams await with delicate stories To be weaved into existence for me alone The breeze tells me how discomfort Can be remedied simply By the breeze cooling me Or a cushion of air to insulate me How gentle the breeze is Softly stroking my skin Repeating a mantra Appropriate for the moment All I need to do is listen And be lulled this way or that There's no wrong way today But I stay right where I am Soothed in a way Only made possible When on the right side Of the elements

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Paul Willason

Date: 4/6/2023 5:51:00 PM

Sounds a good place to be, to spend some there, gather in thoughts, breath, frayed edges and give them rest. Enjoyed

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/6/2023 10:54:00 PM

Lovely, thanks Paul. I'd intended to metaphor breeze to the nth degree but a meditative style came out and it was quite pleasant so I gave it a chance. Glad you liked it

Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/6/2023 5:31:00 PM

Not out of boredom but from sheer comfort and restful relaxation, your poem had me nearly asleep. The soft breeze wafting with its gentle rhythm, so relaxing I wa z z z z z z z z z

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/6/2023 10:51:00 PM

Haha glad you liked it, better than your comment on my half finished poem that gives me a kick up the bum (or tried to but I'd already started writing this :) )