awash

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lucidity waves wash over until lungs full of vision drown drowning in never evers of forevers without measure of end or tether to solid ground disorientating kaleidoscope images whirl, tricking tunnel vision into the peripheral walking, dreaming, speaking, distraction whilst edges spin with nothing to hang on to one captured second, split into atoms, viewed in thousands of ways until I forget all the ways I drown

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 10/16/2024 1:39:00 PM

Dear DD, I found your well-inked poem and, yes, your reading of it to be very intriguing and evocative. I loved how you explored the themes of disorientation, perception, and the overwhelming nature of consciousness—to the point of drowning. What not to love! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Ink Empress

Date: 10/16/2024 12:37:00 PM

Wow i can listen to your voice all day dear DD, so beautiful! You read so well! I have a soul sister on insta that sounds like you her name is emily (aussie) love it! And beautiful poem, some poems are even better when spoken, and this one is definitely one of those that i felt as i read even more! So touching! I especially love “ drowning in never evers of forevers without measure of end or tether to solid ground” ah! That!! Hits deep! You should do more spoken, i love this! Sending you light

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/16/2024 12:47:00 PM

Aww thank you! I occasionally feel like recording and this one did seem to come alive when spoken :) thank you for your kind words, appreciated x

David Kavanagh

Date: 10/16/2024 2:02:00 AM

So many ways we metaphorically drown each day Dilly, until we move on to the next distracting second, perhaps an overwhelming event sparked off this thought provoking piece, try keep afloat even if its only atoms you/we are swimming through, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/16/2024 2:14:00 AM

Thanks David, I had a busy day yesterday and kept thinking of little lines and making a note. Most of them had lost the spark by the time I went back to them but I quite liked lucidity waves drown, so did what I could to pull a poem into being from it. It was quite nice actually as I just sat and let my subconscious drive the lines. It's a repeating theme of course but I'm currently on a mission to buy the perfect trainers that have been accidentally underpriced, so no time for existentialism today haha

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/15/2024 6:52:00 PM

There are many ways to drown. I'm drowning in too much television and too much politics. Beware the remote. I like this poem. Alas, no painting.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/16/2024 2:10:00 AM

Haha Hilda, I bet more TV would keep me afloat! Glad you like it, thanks for your comment x