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At the Edge of a Petal

Dawn chorus trills arias in duet
Not a dulcet tone morning to forget
Rose shot with purl
A white wedding dress shimmers in sunlight
The blond tresses tied, a threaded delight
Rose petals curl
The fresh flush of a virgin: prescribed writ
The purity evident on soffit
Rose throws to hurl
The serene still reflection in mirror
Belie fervid brow - tester an error?
Rose bud unfurls

By Suzette Crous
19 January 2013

Inspired by the quote by William Carlos Williams: “It is at the edge of a petal that love waits.”

purl (n): sewing thread that is made from gold or silver wire 
shot (adj): woven of two colours in such a way that when the fabric is viewed from different angles the visible colours change.
Fervid: (poet.) Hot, glowing, impassioned. 
Tester (n): Canopy esp. over four-poster bed

Please see the About Section for details explaining the background to this poem.

Usually the same meter (eg as applicable to a couplet) is employed throughout the poem.The number of possible variants following a scheme are too many to list here. Whichever verse pattern you decide on, it must be followed throughout the poem. In this poem I am exploring the possibility of employing two different meter to accentuate the TAIL (line 3) where I changed the meter in lines one and two from anapaestic trimeter to iambic dimeter in line three.

Lines 1 and 2:  anapestic trimeter 
 * * / | * * / | * * / .....* an additional unstressed syllable
I end some of the lines with an extra feminine syllable (unstressed)

Line 3: iambic dimeter 
         * / | * /

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Date: 1/22/2013 12:41:00 PM
Suzette a very beautiful poem and thank you for the definitions it helped me to understand what the gown looked like. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/22/2013 1:09:00 PM
Thank you, Connie. :-)
Date: 1/20/2013 8:03:00 PM
Dear Suzette, I greatly admire Mr. Williams' romantic poetry and have several of his poetry books. Your poem honors his style and is exquisite!
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/20/2013 11:57:00 PM
Thank you, Connie. It was by accident that I came across Mr Williams'work. I was surprised to learn that he was a pediatrician and general practitioner of medicine - I did not expect to find a poet among the medical fraternity.
Date: 1/19/2013 11:50:00 AM
Suzette, your poem is very lovely, well done and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Zanila Contest, I am very honored. Constance
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/19/2013 12:11:00 PM
You are welcome, Contance. :-)
Date: 1/19/2013 7:08:00 AM
I really enjoyed your poem and reading the comment which added the historical context.well thought out poem.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/19/2013 2:46:00 PM
*wish.... Thank you for the complement, Richard :-)
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/19/2013 8:21:00 AM
I sometimes which to break away from the ordinary and embrace the history behind our words and deeds. I am pleased that it had appealed to you.