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In the middle of June when the fireflies swoon, And the warmth of the sun lingers on, The dusk pantomimes Mister Moon as he climbs, And the long light of heaven is drawn. The complexion of leaves on such temperate eves, Isn't lost on the creatures of shade, Yet a lightning bug's dance is for naught but romance, That eternal game, perfectly played. Up-and-down thru twilight they sashay their gold light, Thus insuring their rhythm's just SO, O'er the untrimmed tall grasses and buds they make passes At prospects, now drawn to their glow. But other "bright" creatures seem fond of the features Of glittering lightning bug lovers, So with parents discretion the kids take possession, With jars that have holes in the covers. The aim of this duty would seem to be beauty - The soft phosphorescence to see, And while MOST kids admire that glowing green fire, They don't always let them go free. Some squish them with fingers as glowing stuff lingers, Then write with it, words or their name, And by lease of this act they've now learned, in fact, To KILL ... without conscience or blame. Now, while it might seem that this childish scheme Only snuffs a few creatures that crawl, Through it we thus impeach the one we SHOULD teach, That ALL life is precious ... no matter HOW small. ~ Honorable Mention ~ in the "A Summer's Day Redo" Poetry Contest, Michelle Faulkner, Judge & Sponsor. (Required words in bold).

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Date: 9/15/2019 10:23:00 AM
Amazing poetry my friend. We caught the fireflies a would set them by our nightstand to watch as we fell asleep--but we released then next morn. As catching a new batch was fun too. Dad let us, while mom demanded we stop doing that. We did stop when we got older. A fav- your creativity and immense talent glow in this creation.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/8/2019 12:54:00 AM
Oh, thank you so kindly, Sir Roberto - I'm glad you enjoyed this one, and that it brought back good memories. Blessings, my friend! :o)
Date: 9/5/2019 1:34:00 PM
This is an amazing write G, you KNOW how much I love internal rhyme, this is an instant classic, too bad about the line thing, rules rules...rules, they...rule! Love the ending I too appreciate all life even bugs life. (Although I must admit many mosquitos have met their demise at my hands)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/8/2019 12:53:00 AM
Thanks so much, John - some insects are dangerous and MUST meet their end for our protection, but I think the underlying lesson is a good one. Blessings, Brother - so happy you liked it!
Date: 8/30/2019 6:49:00 PM
Sorry that you went past the 16 line limit or I know this masterpiece would have outshined them all. Congratulations my friend. You know how much I loved this beauty as I faved it! : ) xxoo
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 8/30/2019 7:06:00 PM
Oh, you are very kind, Connie, and I'm so grateful for your wonderful comments - they will be my blue ribbon for this one! I write most everything on my laptop, and this showed as only fourteen lines, so I think I'll have to start proof-reading on my phone or something, cuz it looked fine on my end. No worries - that's how the cookie bounces ... or is it how the ball crumbles?? ;o) <3 Blessings, Dear Poet!
Date: 8/29/2019 3:29:00 PM
Oh, Gregory, this one vexed me, it is literally a song, but since it exceeded the maximum of 16 lines (and since it is about evening, instead of a summer's day) I had to place it lower, but I was enchanted with it!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 8/30/2019 6:59:00 PM
(2) I don't like taking up spots with my errors that others could have filled, but I am very pleased you liked the poem just the same and gave it an HM - thank you kindly! (I think I'll stretch out the fourteen lines now, since it doesn't appear that way anyway). I LOVED the contest! :-) <3
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 8/30/2019 6:57:00 PM
(1) Oh,. dear me, Michelle, I didn't realize ... on my computer it's only fourteen lines, as I was making sure I was under the limit. I guess I should view things on my phone when I'm counting lines (?) ... I apologize, sincerely - I would not have entered it if I'd known. The evening is a part of the day to me, (my favorite part), so that's also MY misunderstanding, and I apologize again ... I'm too "figurative" for my own good, lol. (cont'd)
Date: 8/19/2019 2:46:00 PM
Wow Greg, this beautiful poem brought tears to my eyes. Your ending celebrates the love and compassion you have for all creatures no matter how small. This gorgeous poem is going into my Faves! I am sure it will rate high. It deserves First Place in my eyes! : ) xxoo
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 8/30/2019 7:03:00 PM
This is such a sweet comment, Connie, and I'm very happy that you liked it - that it touched your heart! Sometimes we take for granted what we teach as "harmless", yet from many points-of-view those things may be far from it. I tend to lean in a Buddhist direction when it comes to the preciousness of life. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 8/17/2019 12:17:00 PM
Oh, you trickster you. I read with so much delight, and ended with fright. A fav for me!!!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 8/30/2019 7:00:00 PM
Hehe - you know me, Sunlite ... and thank you so much, I'm pleased you enjoyed it! Blessings! :o) <3