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Many thanks to you Victor my friend, for the pleasure of your collaboration on this poem and for sharing your many poetic talents with me.

 

POTW 15 July 2018       

              Reverberations of the burbling stream ahead evokes
              anticipations of fantasies and distorted expectations
              Perfect porcelain skin ~ russet curls ~ ruby red lips
              Surely even the gods would weep 
              at this manifested apotheosis of angelic perfections?

Trudging the lonely winding path once more 
oblivious to the brambles tearing at his limbs
a small sacrifice ~ the blood he sheds matters not
Time’s swift flight may alleviate the aching heart 
that suffers the pangs of an unrequited love 

              Etched in his mind this image that has fragmented
              the filigree web of his repetitious dreams
              Where his nightmarish inflictions are wrought
              of an agonising sweat soaking torment 
              in the gloom of the nights that liberate him not

Proclamations of love feverishly spilling
On parchment in the wakening dawn
Bled out in words to where beckoning waters flow
Euphonious notes that the winds have borne
Streaming from the very core of his being

              Spinning senses abandoning their out of control defences
              Yet nothing … Nothing ... in his wretchedness can bridge
              the gap to the void in his desolate soul 	
              Deprived by a selfish god of this splendor
              for him to gaze on by day ~ yet in dismal nights Heaven denies 

Day after day to this enigma he brings
serenades that would whip fallen leaves into a frenzy  
and calm raging torrents into lapping stillness
Mindless he to the lone song bird that flutes soulfully
Or the reiterated sounds of the whispering Echo

              He weeps and grins like a madman at
              the sudden outburst of mirth on those ruby lips
              Fingers dip in to caress once again 
              Collapsing the perfection into 
              a thousand shimmering, mocking ripples. 

Must he drown in his very own tears?
Surrender to his darkest dreams?
A slave to an intoxication of his own making
On the morrow perchance the gods may be kinder 
A whisper carried on a teasing wind floats to his ears

Above throughout the high mountains, He can hear Echo whispering softly Her mellifluous dirge of death. Yet he cares not ~ His mind centres on the god that so oft appears in the stream. Lust eats at his heart as he feels the urge to plunge down into the depths of the viridian stream, To copulate in bliss with his newly found love. Yet something holds him back. Curse Nemesis for depriving him from his ambrosial love. Weak in dreamy languor, he falls faint, And dies ………Unable to kiss his shadow in the stream.
SYNOPSIS In Greek mythology, Narcissus was a hunter from Thespiae in Boeotia, known for his beauty. The son of the river god Cephissus and nymph Liriope, he was so self-opinionated, disdaining those who loved him. Nemesis disliked his behaviour and lured Narcissus to a pool where he saw an image of beauty reflected in the water. He instantly fell in love with it not realising it was the reflection of himself. Unable to tangibly connect with this epitome of beauty, Narcissus lost his will to live. He stared at his reflection by day and was distraught at nightfall when he could not see it. Echo, the woodland nymph, with her ceaseless chattering, perhaps in an effort to conceal, angered the goddess queen Terra when she demanded to know the whereabouts of her husband Zeus who was cavorting with the woodland nymphs at the time. Terra punished her with a curse that only allowed her to speak the last words she heard. Perchance, while haplessly wandering in the woods, Echo saw and secretly fell desperately in love with Narcissus who sadly wasn’t aware of her, in spite of Echo cleverly repeating his last words in order to attract his attention. POTW 15 July 2018

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Date: 4/17/2019 9:12:00 AM
I can see why this was POTW. Exceptional poetry and artistic partnership. A piece to be proud of.
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Maria Williams
Date: 4/18/2019 8:51:00 AM
Thank you so much Rick, I appreciate your visit and support....Maria Hugs
Date: 8/2/2018 9:56:00 AM
WoW! Now this is some serious Romanticism, Maria and Victor. Great poetry! Kudos to POTW. Well deserved. Love and smiles to the both of youse.
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Date: 8/2/2018 7:15:00 PM
Thank you Freddie, so lovely to see you, and thanks from both Victor and me....Hugs and best wishes
Date: 7/26/2018 5:34:00 AM
Back again to read this inspiring and wondrous creation , gifted by two very good friends of mine and very creative poets. This is a rare jewel and a precious creation that truly inspires this old poet my friends!!!
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Date: 8/2/2018 7:16:00 PM
Thanks so much Robert from both Victor and me, so glad that you liked this my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 7/17/2018 9:08:00 AM
Hugs and congratulations to you both! xomo :)
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Date: 7/18/2018 7:32:00 AM
Thank you so much Maureen, so glad that you liked this. From Victor and me... hugs
Date: 7/17/2018 6:07:00 AM
Congrats on this wonderful poem getting POTW for both of you..
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Date: 7/18/2018 7:30:00 AM
Thank you so much Si for the revisit Thank you for the support from both Victor and me... hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 10:41:00 PM
Wow,this is absolutely fantastic Maria.Thanks for the added knowledge as well.Definitely deserving of POTW honour.A very clever piece.
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Date: 7/18/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thank you so much Sylvia so glad that you liked this. Thank you for the visit and comment...Maria hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 8:40:00 PM
Wow! Dear Maria and Victor, such a magnificent and glorious work of poetic beauty so artistically and creatively expressed! Every line is simply so superb and flawless and flows seamlessly like liquid gold from one poet to the other, as two become one lustrous poetic voice. Congratulations on your well deserved and excellent POTW honors for this exquisite mythical masterpiece and a big fav for me! Warmest wishes and love always.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/18/2018 6:25:00 AM
Susan my dear friend, how lovely to see you. You really do write the most superb poetic comments, thank you always for that and your support, you know we really do appreciate it....Maria hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 7:19:00 PM
Thankyou for your dramatic work, I marvel at it. The words "JUST" flow like honey … Jane.
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Date: 7/18/2018 6:22:00 AM
Thank you so much Jane, so glad that you liked this....Maria hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 6:25:00 PM
How wonderful that your collaboration has been honored with POTW! Congratulations to both of you on this deserving honor! : )
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Date: 7/18/2018 6:21:00 AM
Thanks so much for the revisit Connie. Truly appreciated from both Victor and me my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 5:24:00 PM
Big congratulations Maria, and to Victor for this stunning collaboration. Tom
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Date: 7/17/2018 9:47:00 AM
Thank you Tom, so glad that you liked it....Maria and Victor Hugs
Date: 7/15/2018 10:43:00 AM
Oh, my - way, way over my head but wonderful classical writing on the part of both of you. Absolutely deserving of poem of the week. Congratulations to you both.
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Date: 7/16/2018 4:49:00 AM
Thank you Sunlite, so happy that you liked it. It was such a great pleasure collaborating with Victor, a truly wonderful story teller....Maria Hugs
Date: 7/12/2018 3:20:00 AM
Hi Maria, nice collaboration... I think you did the first 8 stanzas and Victor wrote the rest. Let me know, otherwise, I might be drowning in my very own tears, and surrender myself to my darkest dreams... You've done a magnificent job.
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Date: 7/15/2018 1:41:00 AM
I used your statements, or partner's ... the 8th stanza... By the way, I sent you my personal email... Pash
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Date: 7/12/2018 5:40:00 AM
Lol. Classified information, my lips are sealed. Thanks Pashang for the lovely comment and visit,and I hope many visits in the future, so dont go drowning yourself in your own tears, surrendering to your darkest dreams now, that wont be cool. Thanks my friend for your support always, I do appreciate it.....Maria hugs
Date: 7/11/2018 5:56:00 AM
What a delight to find this wondrous collaboration by two magnificently talented poets that I am so honored to be friends with! This jewel is top class all the way and every verse golden! Bravo my friends, a gem and a fav...
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Date: 7/11/2018 10:10:00 PM
Coming from one of Poetry Soup's best poets, a truly kind and sincere soul, that is music to the ears. Thank you Robert dear friend for the visit, lovely comment and fave, truly appreciated from both Victor and me....Hugs
Date: 7/11/2018 5:55:00 AM
What a delight to find this wondrous collaboration by two magnificently talented poets that I am so honored to be friends with! This jewel is top class all the way and every verses golden! Bravo my friends, a gem and a fav...
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Date: 7/10/2018 3:42:00 PM
Love the subject matter and the theme, and then you two, just blown me away, with what i read,,we have such talent here on soup., and i count both of you,up there with the very best..
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Date: 7/11/2018 3:08:00 AM
So glad that you liked this Harry, and how nice of you to bestow such high praise. Thank you both for the visit and that amazing comment from both Victor and me....Hugs
Date: 7/10/2018 12:14:00 PM
Amazing collaboration, Maria & Victor.. a fav. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/11/2018 3:09:00 AM
Thanks so much Eve both for the visit and wonderful support. Truly appreciated from both Victor and me....Maria Hugs
Date: 7/10/2018 6:50:00 AM
Well, its all Greek to me lol...fantastical write, my dear friends...a superb collab from the oracle of Delphi and the great Zeus...a Fav!...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 7/10/2018 7:40:00 AM
Thank you so much WW, from both Victor and me. You're next, drag out some good old Italian Mythology, and we'll do a collab. Thanks for the Fave my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 7/9/2018 1:29:00 PM
Greek mythology has always fascinated me, so no wonder this excellent collaboration appealed so much to me. Unrequited love, heartache and unfulfilled expectations eventually lead to loss of dreams & life. Well done to both of you, Maria & Victor! Regards // paul
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Date: 7/10/2018 5:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Paul, and me too. Your excellent feedback is always appreciated my dear friend,and yes you are so right , unrequited love can destroy a Soul,as in this case, though should we say a different twist to it. Thanks for the visit and comment Paul. I hope you are 100% now?...Maria hugs
Date: 7/9/2018 7:40:00 AM
Surely a masterpiece written by both of you, since I am interested in religions, different cultures, and especially the thoughts of greek, their various gods, this poem and especially the explanation in the end was reslly helpful for me, I am glad that I come across this page, whenever I read your poems believe me I do learn something new and so far I have learned many interesting things, good luck and have a really nice day
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Date: 7/10/2018 6:02:00 AM
Thank you my young friend Faraz, both for the visit and your excellent comments always. A real pleasure to hear you saying that you gain something from us Poets. I am so glad, and if you ever need some help with your poems don't hesitate to ask....Maria hugs
Date: 7/9/2018 4:33:00 AM
This beautiful collaboration is a masterpiece Maria and Victor! I adore poems about Greek mythology. I hope this is entered in the contest. Bravo! : )
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 11:27:00 PM
Yes, a collaboration contest. Hope you both enter this. : )
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Maria Williams
Date: 7/9/2018 5:30:00 AM
Thanks so much Connie, your excellent feedback is always welcome my dear friend. We share a common interest then, Greek mythology is my favorite too, pure nectar of the gods. Thank you from both Victor and me. Is there a contest?...Maria hugs
Date: 7/8/2018 8:49:00 PM
Maria.. Tonight, the mountain sky is clear. In a few hours the stars will tease me with their winks. The twilight is for your poem, and it's as enjoyable as the coming sunset!
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Date: 7/8/2018 10:58:00 PM
Oh wow, I can see why you are called Lyric Man lol. Thank you for the most descriptive and charming comment. Truly appreciated from both Victor and me.....Maria :)
Date: 7/8/2018 6:37:00 PM
Wow! What a treat to read such poetry...poetry that brings the beauty and mystery of long-ago myths into such a clear and pleasant view. I had never read the story of Narcissus before. And, yes, the music was powerful and perfect. Congrats, you two, on another little masterpiece. FAVED of course.
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Date: 7/8/2018 11:01:00 PM
Thanks Carole, for a beautiful comment. I just knew that this poem would appeal to you, being a school teacher. A good story for your students then:) Appreciate also your visit and Fave my dear friend. A big thanks from Victor and me....Maria hugs
Date: 7/8/2018 4:42:00 PM
As an empath I keep away from Narcissits.. I know a few people who are like this...Ive never understood the need for such vanity...Great collaboration between you two..
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Maria Williams
Date: 7/8/2018 11:06:00 PM
Well I can understand a bit of vanity, after all, us women do try to keep ourselves looking as best as we can. Though the Vanity that is Narcissistic , that I don't understand at all. Thanks from both Victor and me S1 for the visit. Truly appreciated....Maria hugs
Date: 7/8/2018 3:00:00 PM
- An excellent co-write ... I admire it from all sides ... with yours knowledge and ancient Greek mythology ... woow ... impressive and a pleasure to read, Maria & Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/8/2018 11:08:00 PM
Thanks so much Anne-Lise, speaking for both of us that is truly wonderful to hear. I hope you are well my friend?...Maria hugs
Date: 7/8/2018 1:57:00 PM
It goes without saying that as a Greek i came in contact with Greek Mythology from the first days of my schooling therefore I am fascinated when I see people dealing with it with such precision and scholarly ability, let us not forget the poetic apotheosis that is celebrated in this work of art! Therefore, I would like to express my admiration for the final outcome of this poem which is the work of my dearest friends: Victor and Maria, Maria and Victor! Congratulations! A FAV Superbly Written!
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Date: 7/8/2018 11:13:00 PM
If we have truly pleased the Greek Guru, master of Greek Mythology, then we are both thrilled and flattered. thank you Demetrios, music to my ears and I'm sure Victor's as well. Thank you also for the Fave, truly appreciated dearest friend.....Maria and Victor hugs
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