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she ... gently shivered ... venetian-sieved ribbons of moonlight painting her face ... the words struggled on her lips, then ever-so-softly dripped like maple syrup, and found purchase in my mind ... plopping sticky and plump with feigned self-importance ... "Don't you love me?" ah, divine duplicity ... the cumber of that phrase - the blessed ships launched and scuttled for its sake ... how many such pivotal instances had felt their import? and yet never with the same flavor ... at times, allaying the tongue with sugary sate, at others, nipping the cheeks with candor's bitter tang ... (oft', the even more acrid lace of indifference), each such prospect seasoned by the reply, of course ... now ... now that indulgence was upon MY tray, and oh, how passion could be cruel - how it so contrarily demanded virtue, and how such immaculate forms and visages as hers pleaded for charity ... still, moonlight speaks a tongue its own - one of sensuality and advantage, of soft skin and warm creases and sweet nectars ... of throaty sighs and pleadings ... and that vocabulary was my language - my true vernacular - the duplicitous poison of all such scoundrels, transformed by twilight ... so ... carefully, tenderly, adoringly, I whispered the sweet lie ... "Why, yes ... yes, my love ... I do." Written on May 2, 2021

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Date: 5/19/2021 10:56:00 AM
There is always immense depth, flowing beauty and magnificent creativity in you poetic gems my friend. Such as always awes this old poet! This to me illustrates that which makes poetry so inspiring. A gam , a fav.. God bless.
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Date: 5/12/2021 8:28:00 AM
A thought provoking write. The cat and mouse play of words (+ thoughts) in the trigger trap question, 'Do you love me?' is grand. A splendid read, Gregory. Congratulations! Brian
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Date: 5/12/2021 5:12:00 AM
you are a very good writer and i enjoyed reading this sensual piece; the opening lines in particular are very strong..but you know what i'm going to say lol a proliferation of ellipses (less is more with them), the use of 'ever-so' and 'oft' pushed it down into 6th..still a good poem..congrats on your win in my contest!
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Date: 5/3/2021 11:40:00 PM
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Date: 5/3/2021 6:03:00 AM
So well written but so sad at the same time... isn't it so much better to find passion with the one you will live and die for? I love this shows amazing, even brilliance, in writing skill, but is so sad in a way... God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
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