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The Tide Was Very Outgoing

Frolicking in the night tide In her Chiffon lingerie A twisted undercurrent Stole her modesty.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 5/31/2017 5:17:00 PM
Ray, congratulations on your win.. ~*
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Ray Gridley
Date: 6/2/2017 4:40:00 PM
Thanks Eve.
Date: 5/31/2017 4:48:00 PM
Cheeky undercurrent, Ray :) A marine 'malfunction'!! Surely this merited a higher placing! Congratulations. // paul
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Ray Gridley
Date: 6/1/2017 2:50:00 PM
Cheers Paul.
Date: 5/30/2017 9:33:00 PM
Humorous, Ray! Congrats!
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Ray Gridley
Date: 6/1/2017 2:49:00 PM
Thanks Kim.
Date: 5/30/2017 4:27:00 PM
Now there's some 'uncovered' imagery for you! Very clever and well-done. Congrats on your nice placement in the contest. Sandra
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Ray Gridley
Date: 5/31/2017 5:32:00 PM
Thank you Sandra!
Date: 4/24/2017 5:16:00 PM
Hi Ray , yes so much in so few words beautiful :)))) hugs
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Ray Gridley
Date: 5/31/2017 5:32:00 PM
Thanks Niall.
Date: 4/23/2017 8:42:00 PM
did I ever fave this one. I will right now if I didn't yet.
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Ray Gridley
Date: 4/24/2017 4:54:00 AM
Thank you so much, Andrea!
Date: 4/23/2017 6:53:00 PM
Your words flowed effortlessly and the imagery created an atmosphere of understanding that brought the whole scene to life in my mind. Emile. #7
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Date: 4/24/2017 4:54:00 AM
Thanks for your nice comment Emile.
Date: 4/23/2017 5:09:00 AM
Excellent Ray, you are very talented, a joy to read your works. :))
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Date: 4/23/2017 5:49:00 AM
Thanks Roy, it's good to try these different forms.
Date: 4/22/2017 7:22:00 PM
wow, now THIS is GREAT dodoitsu. If it were my contest, this would get first place (of what i Have seen so far!!)
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Ray Gridley
Date: 4/23/2017 5:47:00 AM
That's a nice compliment, thanks Andrea!
Date: 4/21/2017 7:02:00 PM
I've loved, been an addict, swam the ocean, worshiped and cried on poetry soup tonight. Thank you for something really funny!
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Ray Gridley
Date: 4/22/2017 3:38:00 AM
Thanks Sunlite, sounds like you've had a busy day.
Date: 4/21/2017 6:51:00 PM
Ha ha ha, thank God it was the undercurrent and not a shark and it was at night! Good one Ray!~Che :)
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Ray Gridley
Date: 4/22/2017 3:39:00 AM
Haha, Che, the sharks were all killed off in Jaws. Cheers!
Date: 4/21/2017 3:50:00 PM
ha ha ha so so funny Ray!:-)hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/21/2017 3:53:00 PM
Thanks Jan, I thought I'd try the dodoitsu. Had to work hard to stop writing it in rhyme!