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The Hurting

These park leaves were once vibrant green, then soft yellow and bright red.  Now they are dirt brown and withered, useless as I crunch them underfoot.  Grey skies with no discernible cloud forms stretch out to a lonely horizon where the sun once shone in brilliant tangerine hue.  Songbirds have all gone south, though a stray blackbird mocks me from a light pole just ahead.  In the distance a solitary woodpecker bangs his head against a hollowed out tree that has long since surrendered up it's spirit.

love is like the wind
once a warming zephyr breeze 
winter gales chill bones

This old oaken bench was our respite, a place to muse about the past, present, future.  Love once thrived on this path of a thousand steps.   Before long I drift off into a dream ~  Hand in hand we pledged our love/before our friends and God above/we sailed the skies and seven seas/we lived our lives just as we pleased/until the day the fire went out/now all we do is scream and shout ~

I come to, realizing that I am alone.  Cold and alone.  It begins to snow, like ashes from an angry, awakened volcano. The fallout is beautiful if not sad, yes, maddening in it's relentlessness and yet... comforting somehow.  My raven nemesis alights on the grass nearby.  He gawks at me with eyes that are coal black, yet I detect a softness.  I sense he feels my pain, my anguish.  Maybe his were caws of consolation rather than ridicule.  Perhaps we are kindred spirits, he and I. 

grey skies dissipate
moonlight casts a soft shadow
never truly alone


bt

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Date: 11/7/2019 3:12:00 PM
This was intense. Ann
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Son of Spock
Date: 11/7/2019 3:53:00 PM
Nothing sadder than love gone cold. Thanks
Date: 9/25/2019 10:05:00 AM
a hollowed out tree that has long since surrendered up it's spirit. I sense he feels my pain, my anguish. Maybe his were caws of consolation rather than ridicule. Perhaps we are kindred spirits, he and I. An example of "True Friendship". I hope it helps your friend power through. We are alone in our sorrows yet in good company all the same. ***Niyna
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Son of Spock
Date: 9/26/2019 2:35:00 PM
Yes, she's very special. Thx
Date: 7/19/2019 6:05:00 PM
Not bad Son of Spock. Let me read the first eight... -Richard
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Son of Spock
Date: 7/19/2019 8:27:00 PM
Hey that's cool. Feedback appreciated
Date: 5/28/2019 8:57:00 AM
You have set the standard so high with this one. I read it often.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/28/2019 6:11:00 PM
I've read up on haibuns and this seem to fit the criteria but I'm always looking to improve
Date: 5/17/2019 5:18:00 PM
This is so well written , bringing the emotions and sights forward and blending it all as you have. Excellent :)
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/17/2019 6:55:00 PM
I rather enjoy this form thanks
Date: 5/17/2019 4:01:00 PM
This is so beautiful that, reading through, I'm feeling whether a woodpecker or a raven nemesis. And an old oaken bench too) Nicely done, SoS.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/17/2019 6:55:00 PM
Caw. Thanks kurt
Date: 5/16/2019 6:20:00 PM
Affecting, poetic melancholy . . . really like how you turned the 2nd prose stanza into a couplet too. Excellent.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/17/2019 7:52:00 AM
Yes somewhat non-traditional but I guess she daydreams in rhyme. Thx
Date: 5/14/2019 8:04:00 AM
Art combined with a potent mind transcends ordinary. Worth reading again.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/14/2019 7:53:00 PM
:)
Date: 5/13/2019 9:24:00 AM
Intense from beginning to end. There's a lot of brilliant metaphors that open the emotions for the reader. A real poem!
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/13/2019 12:37:00 PM
Thanks veg-maestro
Date: 5/12/2019 5:34:00 PM
Indeed, when love fills the chambers of the heart everything is seen marvelously through its eyes.. but when it abandons our soils, all is dark.. sad and tasteless.. pain when shared, hope is regained.. A breathtaking rendition, Son of Spock! You have weaved a work of art that captivates both the heart and the mind.. a great pleasure to read.. in my fave list for its beauty! Deepest regards and blessings.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/13/2019 12:37:00 PM
Faves are coolish. Thanks B
Date: 5/12/2019 9:27:00 AM
Creative...storytelling like... enjoyable... I like the way you inserted the three liners... "love is like the wind once a warming zephyr breeze winter gales chill bones"
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 4:02:00 PM
A haibun hallmark. Danke
Date: 5/12/2019 6:34:00 AM
What can I say Tommy...you da man...superb haibuning...happy endings my friend...and one day I will use my real voice...soupers beware lol...^WW^...{*J*}
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 7:59:00 AM
Looking forward to it. Thanks for visit
Date: 5/12/2019 2:54:00 AM
Sad, yet beautiful. Beautifully sad. The last three lines, exquisite, haunting.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 7:59:00 AM
I hope you keep it in mind, esp. the last line
Date: 5/12/2019 12:16:00 AM
It begins to snow, like ashes from an angry, awakened volcano. The contrast in this line is beautiful. Great work!
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 7:58:00 AM
Thanks for specificity
Date: 5/11/2019 11:15:00 PM
Excellent narration and appropriate haikus. Loved the imagery.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 7:57:00 AM
Cool beans
Date: 5/11/2019 9:52:00 PM
WoW! You do well in this form( amongst many other forms). I could sense I a profound loss as well. Good imagery as well. It's good to see you posting again.Excellent job- Alexis
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/12/2019 7:57:00 AM
Welcome to Tommy's corner
Date: 5/10/2019 7:26:00 PM
A wonderful piece! The grieving process, follows through to see what was perhaps always there but for the pain.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/11/2019 3:20:00 PM
Thanks Kimmie
Date: 5/10/2019 8:31:00 AM
Such a tender and moving piece, Tom. Written so well with great heart and soul. Absolute brilliant write my friend. I can see why your hand is very well admired. All the best, Charlie
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/10/2019 6:10:00 PM
Thanks much my cowboy partner
Date: 5/9/2019 9:44:00 PM
Love, loss, with so many painful emotions tugging deeply at the heart. An ache lingering within, yet there is peace at the same time. "never truly alone" Only you can write like this, making it feel so real. ~ Brandy
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/10/2019 8:14:00 AM
For some it's all too real. Thanks brandy
Date: 5/8/2019 3:39:00 PM
You have spun a fine tale lad.So many feelings expressed so vividly. Well done. Have a great day.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/8/2019 4:45:00 PM
U2 me Irish friend
Date: 5/8/2019 3:03:00 PM
this gentle, soulful float of thoughts is really what you are made of, tommy... be proud that vulnerability is one of your strong aces... huggs
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/8/2019 4:45:00 PM
That's very thoughtful
Date: 5/8/2019 2:09:00 AM
A moving piece that begged to be read more than once - memories filled with regret, and the pain of loss, the hurting that somehow also intensifies the beauty in everything around us. The need to be positive in the midst of biting reality. And yes, we are never truly alone...Fabulous write!
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/8/2019 4:46:00 PM
Always a silver lining somewhere. Thanks
Date: 5/7/2019 8:04:00 PM
Even critics were left speechless, fantastically worded! Aloha William...
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/8/2019 4:46:00 PM
Aloha back
Date: 5/7/2019 9:25:00 AM
I wish I could find the words to express how I feel reading this. It's difficult, but I'll try. I felt something inside me stir, a mixture of loneliness, and desire, and hope. And it makes me want more. I'm so glad you are writing and posting again, Tom. It's inspiring for me, and makes me feel happy. Thank you for sharing your gift with us. PS, I agree, it's one of your best.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/7/2019 11:58:00 AM
I had an excellent source of inspiration
Date: 5/6/2019 6:43:00 PM
This is one of your best writes that I've seen, and that's coming from someone who thinks everything you write is top-notch. Well done. I need to give it a few more reads, I believe, and am eager to do so.
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Son of Spock
Date: 5/6/2019 7:31:00 PM
I aspire to please. Thanks big phil
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