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The Brine River

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I cried ouch from that old familiar pang
Swimming in the tepid river of brine
My prowess has diminished over time
Now rising is the river with the rain
Throw me a lifeline, I'm drowning in pain
I completely ignored the warning sign
My own handwriting posted on the pine
But my heart jumped in right over the chain
It wasn't long we were over our head
The current seemed to pull us farther out
We reached for memories to float upon
But the good memories had passed ahead
It won't do any good to scream or shout
The river of brine has already won

     an original poem by the "poemdog" Daniel Turner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Date: 3/7/2016 7:26:00 AM
Captures the feeling well.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/7/2016 7:29:00 AM
Thanks, Tom. I'm still laughing at your last poem. Your last two have been off the charts. LOL I appreciate your kindness. Now go write another masterpiece my friend. Peace and have a great day:)
Date: 3/6/2016 1:51:00 PM
- A deep and great sonnet Daniel - Well done - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/6/2016 2:08:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. You always bring such grace. I appreciate your taking the time to read and leave such supportive comments. Peace to you my dear friend:)
Date: 3/6/2016 8:48:00 AM
You're not to fear, Danny. Floating is easier in salt water. Just relax and let the bad memories float away.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/6/2016 9:12:00 AM
Agreed! Like I said once before, If the writer is pleased enough to put it out there, it's good enough for me. I do not have to understand the meaning just enjoy it for what it is!
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/6/2016 8:58:00 AM
You're right. It's just a poem, and those we write have more meaning to us than to anyone else. Some pretend they understand, but do they really? Does it really matter if anyone else does or not? No.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/6/2016 8:53:00 AM
Thank you, Peaches. Much like you it's gotten to the point where it's just a poem. Right?. I am smiling from your visit and hoping you to have a great day. Peace my dear:)
Date: 3/5/2016 6:02:00 PM
Great writing Daniel and thank you so much for reading and commenting. Love, Joyce
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/5/2016 6:10:00 PM
Thank you, Joyce. I always enjoy your kind visits.You just keep on writing and I'll keep on reading. Peace to you sweet lady:)
Date: 3/5/2016 4:14:00 PM
This is so powerful Daniel a great write
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/5/2016 4:25:00 PM
Thank you, Gail. I appreciate your supportive comments. Depression is a sad affair. Thanks again for your time I always enjoy your visits. Peace my dear friend:)
Date: 3/5/2016 4:10:00 PM
I really ejoyed this little glimpse into the id. #7 ;)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/5/2016 4:23:00 PM
Thank you, Connie. Depression always gives the feeling of despair. You know I always appreciate your kind visits and supportive comments. I really like looking at your smile. Peace my dear friend:)