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Within The Clouds

it stormed again in her heart last night
     wild slashing rain
driving hard against the walls
     battering the beat
     and riding the heat
shattering wailing zephyrs
this tempest bemoans her

it stormed again in her heart last night
      hard pulsing thunder
and raw rhythms that quake
and she alone to feel the pain
stark and dark Kentucky rain
tearing past her guard
to lay blasted and bleeding

it stormed again in her heart last night
where daffodils should bloom
where the sun light is cast aside
and tulips weaken and fold
     cherries lose their hold
lightening has shadowed eyes
willow boughs must always weep

it stormed again in her heart last night
as she alone watched the sun die
fragile hands, and hollow cheeks
    torn and worn, the shattered
in the red and blue that mattered
in a dark lake beneath the crying moon
     that is where the tears go

Copyright © Christie Moses

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  1. Date: 12/12/2014 8:22:00 AM
    Beautiful write. I hope all is well in your world and that your pen continues to flow...TAH

  1. Date: 4/16/2009 10:06:00 AM
    its sad but beautiful

  1. Date: 4/12/2009 4:44:00 PM
    You bring the pain of your character to life through the irony of watching daffodils that should have bloomed, dying sun and a crying moon. Excellent work, Moon Child! Love, carolyn

  1. Date: 4/12/2009 4:28:00 AM
    A searingly passionate write, Christie..braced by stormy imagery and sybolisms. Engulfs the reader with its inequitable loneliness and untameable sadness. Hope all's well with you and yours!! Happy Easter!! Be well and be happy! Love, Mikki

  1. Date: 4/10/2009 11:56:00 AM
    Beautiful work, if only a ray of happiness would pierce those clouds, but sometimes our life is so clouded that, that ray is far away...Raul

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 2:04:00 PM
    ....I am sincerely hoping again, that they are merely as that passing zephyrs wind within "Your Beautiful Life!!!?":):):)~And, "That Your Heart & Soul, Shall Forever Be Filled With The Brighter Sides of Love & Hope!!!!?":):):)~"Profoundly Stirring, Exquisite Write"~"My Love Always To 'You & Brianna,' Forevermore, John!!!!"~"Happy Easter Beautiful Christie!!!!":):):) ~

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 1:56:00 PM
    ....And as for this profoundly heart twisting write here dear~written from the very depths of "A Beautiful Souls Deepest Treasure Chest!!!!":):):)~Again I find my own self moved immensly within, the sorrow which I find amid these "Your Words"~for as I have said to "You" before dear lady~"They Are 'Your Words!!!!'":):):)....cont....

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 1:49:00 PM
    "Precious, Priceless, Beautiful & Beyond Christie Moses~Hello To 'You & Your Little Angel Brianna' Dear Gifted Lady!!!!":):):)~I sincerely hope that life has been treating You Both wonderfully Christie~And, that "Good Friday & Easter Weekend, Shall Be Filled With Joys Beyond Your Dreams!!!!":):):)....cont....

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 10:45:00 AM
    Christie, ... yes, yes, yes, expertly told ... a musical delight on a subject of sorrow ... I love this without aplogies, great write.

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 9:08:00 AM
    incredible emotion in a personal way, Christie, I'm feeling there is more to listen to from this person, love it! and thanks for comments on my short, jmg

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 7:27:00 AM
    I love this side of you-- deep-- and emotionally draining--and when I read poetry.. It has to excite me or drain me-- this did both :)

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 7:12:00 AM
    What's happening with Christie Moses?....always something exciting, something passionate. "In a dark lake beneath the crying moon" This is so lonely and helpless. I'm not saying this is you, Christie, but sometimes when I'm lonely and helpless it gives me strength and a weird sort of pleasure in this kind of fantasizing. Mucho good, dear. Love, daver

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 5:58:00 AM
    This is such a touching write. You put so much heart into each line. Sad but beautifully penned by one with a beautiful Spirit. Smiles from Lolita

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 1:58:00 AM
    You are such a blessing here Christie.Your work delights the ear.The joy of PS shines thru your support.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.Easter blessings to you & yours

  1. Date: 4/9/2009 12:37:00 AM
    A truly lyrical work you have here, Christie. The repetition of the same line on each verse works effectively and perfectly well to umistakingly drive home and emphasize the theme of the piece, akin to Robert Frost's "And miles to go before I sleep/and miles to go before I sleep." Well written, my dear. Regards, Fred

  1. Date: 4/8/2009 10:12:00 AM
    Hi Christie... the sadness of of a lonely and battered heart echoes through this poem.....

  1. Date: 4/8/2009 9:15:00 AM
    Love the repitition of the opening line of each showed the pain very well in the the bit about Kentucky rain...cherries lose their hold...all good lines in this well written piece that reveals pain.

  1. Date: 4/8/2009 7:40:00 AM
    Like the kyrielle flavour to this one Christie.One for my favourites.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments & kind words

  1. Date: 4/8/2009 7:08:00 AM
    The last lines, oh Christie they're beautiful. Tragic and heartbreaking but beautiful. Love ya bunches.

  1. Date: 4/8/2009 6:59:00 AM
    Yes, agree with both ladies below, the beauty comes out no matter how sad the write. My heart goes out to you as you make me believe this is a deep loneliness and heartbreak you really experienced, maybe even last night. Such an outstanding write, though it makes me feel like you need a big hug. Sending one. With love, Shar xoxo