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Mini Dubai

Two sparrows kiss,sitting
On a high bough of the tamarind.
Like a tamarind seed, my town, nicknamed 'Mini Dubai',
Had burgeoned and branched on the bank of  Kanoli canal.

Now the silvered canal sprawls on its death-bed.

Busy pedestrians walk down
An ancient bridge, built by the British.
As the traffic light has lost its eye balls,
A potbellied police man dances and controls.
Jalopies groan, and modern cars whiz.
A long whistle:an ambulance with the wounded
And a van with the wedding party, halt side by side,
As the southern and the northern hemispheres  
Of emotions meet at a single point ,by chance.

The nostalgic smell of the canal sops in the sizzling tang from a cafeteria.

Among the concrete buildings that seethe under the tanning rays,
The splurging women whirl in the hurry wind.The stink of sweat
And the aroma of the Arabian perfumes choke the air in shops,
Where, sometimes, the chicanery peek through the glassed.
To the government offices nearby, the applications drafted in blood 
And salt, scurry only to get the obsequies in the waste baskets. 
The sots creep like snakes in the yard of Sandra Bar

A crow sits on an electric post and watches all below with a smile of wisdom.

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  1. Date: 9/27/2013 8:30:00 PM
    awesome winning poem... linda

  1. Date: 9/25/2013 8:16:00 AM
    Well done, congratulations!

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 4:51:00 PM
    hey, I remember this from before. You were wise to use it in this contest. WELL DONE on your deserved win.

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 4:26:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win in Drake's contest. love and hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 12:34:00 PM
    intricate attention to details with a heart of an observer... congrats, fab!..:)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 11:43:00 AM
    Fabiyas, I just love your approach to the contest. Your images are so vivid felt like I was there. Congratulations on your win in the contest. ;)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:55:00 AM
    you have painted this one nicely...the images come to life and make the reader feel as though they are there with you...good write...congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:28:00 AM
    The descriptions are fabulous....I can see it all........and I love that you took Drake's challenge and wrote your poem with a literal viewpoint! Terrific poem.......congratulations!!

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:03:00 AM
    Great work with placing 6th on my "Know your Place" contest. This was a very "busy" setting you created. Very moving. Very active. Very realistic. Yet, that last line really drove it home. Sparks of wisdom. Nicely done!

  1. Date: 3/28/2013 9:28:00 PM
    Congratulations, with your winning poem FAB , I'm also stopping by to say hi, and wish you an early Happy Easter, just in case I don't have time to stop by in the next few days. take care and have yourself a good one~ Always & Forever *LINDA"

  1. Date: 3/27/2013 5:23:00 PM
    Fabiyas , a nice winning poem, Congrats~SKAT

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 7:19:00 PM
    Fabiyas I love this write. Congrats. Rick

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 8:30:00 AM
    Fabiyas, excellent introduction to this wonderful, unusual place, you capture it so vividly, congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 1:41:00 AM
    My hearty congratulations on this fantastic poem of yours my dear friend Fabiyas! I extremely love and enjoyed reading it and the picture you've portrayed is amazing. Thank you so much for your full support in my contest. Have a blessed Palm Sunday/Weekend! love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 8:46:00 PM
    Great work, Fabiyas! Beautiful descriptions! Congrats on your top win in Chris's Contest! Ruben.

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 12:59:00 PM
    Congratulations on your placement in Chris' "Let The Masks Fall" contest Fab. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 11:40:00 AM
    congrats Fab, I can relate to the jalopies ,old bridge and the nostalgic smell of the canal.. brings back memories of the basin road canals and also the ones market road at ernakulam..electrifying poetry...congrats once more on the placement.....~sashi

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:17:00 AM
    congrats on your win from my wife. Ron. thank you for concern for her health.

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:08:00 AM
    wonderful poem, such excellent imagery. Congratulations on your win in Chris' contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 6:55:00 AM
    Such a wonderful write, almost like a camera swinging across the scene but with all the senses peeked then panning up to the crow for a Hitchcock ending. Many Congrats