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Coiled Spring External

it is in this mural of splashing fuses 
that I am lit with a solemn torch……

I gaze with back deck musing 
but  front porch eyes….

I see the distance beyond this world
                   (my own cosmic existence)
a residence I squandered 
but my feet want to tread there

the green that surrounds me 
suffuses me with lakeside dew
melodies drifting only the quiet can hear
ripples that only valid observers see

the kentucky breeze carries a lonely wind
               where has it been?
has it touched the sand I have?
                                (bare toes buried)

somewhere a child cries in the still
shattering  this serenity 
(though some don’t hear it)
along the bank of shoal like tranquility
the birds will wail for broken dreams 
(severed by thoughtless hands)

oh, its only a portrait
                     (an inspiring one though)
as open lashes stumble 
                        a horizons sinking sun
multi hues of reckless red and pink
a blue print  of what life should be
snap shot deftness in the perception
while beneath lay the sorrow

the last lingering tangerine shades
tease and taunt the tops of dogwood trees
oh beauty as far as eyes can see
a few silver shimmers of clouds 
                              in a blue grass sky

flowers bloom sweet pea and peonies
raw carmine kisses in the silence
pretty pansy faces 
                   and grass is verdant
green!! peacock sage and pine
 arrayed in darks and lights
a myriad of different shades 
brilliant in its lush velvet on my feet

to only live life this way (skimming surfaces)
just as the honey suckle does
how blissful that would be
(in all its exquisite ignorance)
branches sway in the song of a blue bird zephyr
as the fingers of it caress my skin

this expanse is my companion

but still I perceive it
what lies beneath
in stunning cognizance 
bearing a strenuous burden

it is in this mural of splashing fuses
that I am lit with a solemn torch

I gaze with back deck musing
but front porch eyes

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  1. Date: 11/20/2009 6:04:00 AM
    Christie, this is a beautiful piece of writing..The title is spot on...You have captured the magic of a Kentucky spring..It's a special place...

  1. Date: 6/8/2009 3:57:00 PM
    you are such a powerful writer you held my attention all the way through and this is why i love reading your work

  1. Date: 6/3/2009 11:27:00 AM
    Christie,..Totally wonderful poem, grace the page with your poetic tallent with such magnetism,..I could have read pages of your thoughts here,...Bravo to you dear poetic friend ! james

  1. Date: 5/25/2009 7:42:00 PM
    Each and every image is epic, awsome, mystical, magical; verses tickle in the back of my head and send tidal waves that splash on my eyes; thanks a lot for the experience!!!:D

  1. Date: 5/10/2009 8:35:00 AM
    I'll read this later, Christie, Bravo on your response to F.T. Jones. You are a sweetheart of intelligence. Love, daver

  1. Date: 5/10/2009 12:45:00 AM
    What an encouraing audience you are Christie to so many here.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

  1. Date: 5/9/2009 8:44:00 AM
    Great personification-poem, Christie! This is truly amazing! The setting, the tone, the mood: a roller coaster of emotions and sentiments in slow motion!! A very creative way to stamp this unique moment of introspection. Great, grea work. Ruben.

  1. Date: 5/8/2009 10:28:00 AM
    Christie, I love this interior/exterior comparisons ... the past and present intertwining ... and feel the deep echoes of the write from primodial cosmos to archetypical deep inside ... your gift of poetry must be a prize for our century ... I am glad to know you and to read your sophiticated work. Love.

  1. Date: 5/8/2009 7:11:00 AM
    Christie I just wanted to thank you and commend you on your comment regarding a that nudge is better than a shout - Something along those lines - Thats my way to just plant a tiny seed of thought and then let it take root or not - Your the first who has commented on that - Thank you, mj

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 8:04:00 PM
    Wow, Christie! You surely are a wordsmith who evokes both imagery and emotion. Excellent poetry (again) from a master writer. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 5:12:00 PM
    Wow, this is going into my fav's..what a terrific poem. I love the back porch-front porch theme. Love, BG

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 4:39:00 PM
    Your poetry is so vivid it hurts. burns itself onto the reader, like a Christie-brand. lol seriously, you rock. and your email today? You hit home. nailed it! We should chat. I have a feeling our mouths wouldn't stop until the cows came home drunk. XO feelin you, sadly, feelin you. love, me

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 2:34:00 PM
    Beautiful flow Christie, incredible write...Raul

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 10:33:00 AM
    Your last lines I read them and wonder about you. You just have a way of looking at things that makes me pause and sit with it for awhile. Lovely~ Love u twerp, Me

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 9:25:00 AM
    Dear Christie, The rainbow descriptions, the underlying sadness YOUR pen flowing with genious I see my YOUR post time YOU are a Late night Writer I am also I will read more of YOU When I see YOU on line late nights Thank YOU for YOUR Gracious Comments ALWAYS...HG

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 8:12:00 AM
    Must have this inmy favourite Christie for the imagery of this inner poem'flowers bloom sweet pea and peonies/raw carmine kisses in the silence/pretty pansy faces / and grass is verdant/green!! peacock sage and pine/ arrayed in darks and lights/a myriad of different shades/brilliant in its lush velvet on my feet'Rgds Brian & thanks for your kind words

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 7:39:00 AM
    Christie my dear very beautiful friend - Good Morning and thank you for the blessings - Both the Poem and the comment - Believe it or not I have been weighing out whether or not I should stop writing because I was feeling people are growing tired of my opinions regarding things - You really lifted my spirit and I thank you - As you know your poetry is simply amazing to me - YF4L - God Bless you always -mj

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 7:23:00 AM
    Hi Christie, Just running out of words to describe your poetry and your talent.... what ever you write, always speaks directly to the soul of the reader. It is a wonderful talent you have... you are a muse and an inspiration :)

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 6:35:00 AM
    So many cool images that just dance off the page... too numerous to mention. Be careful my dear... your genius is showing! Love and hugs, Keith

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 6:03:00 AM
    Amazing. I could only dream of writing with so much heart and passion. Opening your soul so clearly to others as the words drip with such deep emotion and sadness. You write so elegantly and grab the reader. You are so gifted. Thank you for sharing this lovely work of art. Smiles from Lolita