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Vitrine-mannequin on a Winter night I

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Vitrine-mannequin on a Winter night I


Dependent was and amorous obsession 5.5
in burning desert, fresh canteen 4
his sidewalk's fantasy and thoughts' digression, 5.5
the strongest coffee's roasted bean 4
(their phantasms met beyond projectors' light). 5

Exquisite stood upfront, unmoving posture,
distressing emptiness of soul,
unreachable resort her sightly stature,
(- expending skies and ozone hole),
prêt à porter vitrine, on Winter's night.

Behind the glass, a still and standing shadow
abates his hopes (gray sky suspends),
( he takes his foolish stance of wooden scarecrow,
- that through odd sprawls the fields attends ),
was she the blessing of the Gods or else?...

His allegorical, but lonely feeling,
instilled inside, without defect,
while speechless phantoms crossed sky's ceiling,
the downpour soaked, warmth to reject,
(ersatz their wedlock's knolling, fast dispels).

Her uppish, elegant of stance, adjacent,
within arm's reach, kind of abstruse,
albeit abstained, of secular indulgence,
(his head acquired a tilt obtuse),
invited him through faultless, charming lies.

A brass trumpet dispersed its jazzy spieling,
he, thoughtless, leaned on some red booth,
adored her raised one hand's refined appealing,
(- that altruistic, smiling tooth!),
and gazing to the stars but vacant eyes!...

© G.V. 11-16-2013, All Rights Reserved

(Iambic Quintain following 5.5, 4, 5.5, 4, 5 feet on each stanza. 
The rhyme scheme follows this pattern: 
ABABC DEDEC, FGFGH, IJIJH ... and so on.)
(Allegory, Humor)

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  1. Date: 2/4/2014 7:38:00 AM
    It is a rather a poetic exercise and a metrical verse challenge upon myself than anything else. A tough theme to portray, and my performance through Iambic orderly line combinations and rhymes. I consider it a masterful poem. :) G.

  1. Date: 2/4/2014 6:24:00 AM
    Wonderful poem, your favorite one. Congrats on the win, Giorgio

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 9:37:00 PM
    Kinda abstruse, but charming and jazzy. Enchanting write, very nice, thanks, namaste ~N

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 9:22:00 PM
    Quite impressive, deserves the first place, congrats, giorgio!!

  1. Date: 11/21/2013 5:57:00 AM
    Interesting work..She caught his eye but seemed a class above?...Enjoyed reading this one today..So one can go over on one line but go under one on the next and it be metered correctly?...Thanks for stopping by..Sara

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    Date: 12/15/2013 4:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The reference rings a bell, but I do not recall it at all.
    Kendrick Avatar Sara Kendrick
    Date: 11/21/2013 5:58:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh!! This is like the song from years ago where a man fell in love with Glendora who was a mannequin in a department store..Ha!! Sara
  1. Date: 11/18/2013 8:31:00 PM
    Some "people" can be so "fake" sometimes! This is a very unique, creative and entertaining poem! Fantastic work, Giorgio!...I feel so honored to place first in your contest. Thank you very much for the recognition! :)

  1. Date: 11/18/2013 7:28:00 PM
    this is a 10 on a scale of 1 to 7 ! Thank-you for your 1st place , it is an honor in your contest . I came here to Thank-you , yet found beauty !

  1. Date: 11/18/2013 4:27:00 PM
    So complex what you have done!! Great job.

  1. Date: 11/18/2013 12:39:00 PM
    meter perfect with great content, G... the bard will roll in grave... thank you for appreciatimy piece for your recent contest; i'm delighted..:) huggs

  1. Date: 11/17/2013 8:40:00 PM
    Your poetry is ravishing beautiful to me, xxx

  1. Date: 11/17/2013 9:53:00 AM
    An excellent poem as always and so entertaining to read my dear friend Giorgio. Thank you so much for sharing and the smiles from your very wonderful and precious gem. So love it and enjoyed. Thank a lot as well for your inspiring congratulatory comments on my poem. Have a great day! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 11/17/2013 5:20:00 AM
    I would imagine a man to be enthralled and stare at a mannequin. No danger of being slapped, for one. Or mayhaps because of their "unreachable appeal" and also, they don't talk back (lol). A work of art, my friend. Yet another of yours off to my fave file. Licia :-)

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 9:23:00 PM
    Lovely allegorical poem with light humor running thro' out, Giorgio

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 7:29:00 PM
    Hi Giorgio: This flows in perfect meter. Always a joy to read your work. SuZ

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 4:44:00 PM
    Nicely written thanks for sharing it with me. cheri

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 4:14:00 PM
    WOW!!! Yet another remarkable, romantic verse from you, Giorgio! Color me impressed once again! Enjoyed the read this evening, Julie :-)