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Smoke - Charades

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Smoke - Charades

Smoke (Charades)

Abaft the weather bent the time
outside the ship, around the shore
we saw its smoke, in airy climb,
to fumigate from now to yore.

The fume was rising from the two
tall funnels covering its shape
with darkened soot, while dead its crew
was calling us behind its drapes.

The smoke was dancing back and forth
persuading us to move and sway;
Ironic shined the star of North
reluctant breeze slid down the brae.

We thought it was the ship's horn or
three sailor ghosts that danced charades,
behind the smoke, our nightly chore
had mimicked them outside of Hades.

The soot was covering the land,
some scattered lights that blinked and cried,
diffused away at its demand
until forgotten, sank and died.

We followed thence, the engines' chug
to dance around two skyward lines
where hung the ship's torn island flag
and our charades that drowned in brines.

© 10-14-2013, G. V., All Rights Reserved
(Iambic Tetrameter)

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  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:24:00 PM
    Giorgio, enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

  1. Date: 10/29/2013 5:14:00 AM
    - Always enjoyable to read your poetry - Today I want to congratulate your winning poem Giorgio. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 5:46:00 PM
    Thank you all friends! :) G.

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 5:07:00 PM
    This was a very unique entry for the Groove It contest. Fantastic work, once again! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you for the great comments. I truly appreciate it!

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 3:48:00 PM
    Giorgio. As seems to always be the case with your writing, your meter is flawless, but more than the technical aspect, I am overwhelmed with the descriptive visual narration within the tetrameter. This is a definite favorite of mine... it helps that I love all things nautical. CTB

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 11:50:00 AM
    well deserved win Giorgio.... deeply done... congratulations on your win...LINDA

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 7:43:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the contest, Giorgio

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 8:33:00 PM
    Way to go on the contest!

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 8:12:00 PM
    everyone of your poems i have read take me on a journey through your words...congrats on your win with this well crafted gem :)

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 4:02:00 PM
    Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 12:00:00 PM
    Excellent, well-penned verse, Giorgio and many congrats on your win in Nette's contest! Julie :-)

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 11:50:00 AM
    You rock too, G! Really awesome piece right here! *highfive

  1. Date: 10/20/2013 5:24:00 PM
    I was shaking my head whilst reading through this eloquent piece. I had to wonder where all these beautiful thoughts were coming from and I'd love to know what's going on in your head, Giorgio. Good poetry, my friend. Licia :-)

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 2:00:00 AM
    hello, G.. thanks!.. SOUP MAIL!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 5:00:00 PM
    A very interesting and unique take on country music! This poem has a haunting and ominous feel to it. I enjoyed it very much! Fantastic work! I wish you good luck in this contest, as well!

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 2:31:00 PM
    thank you, G.. and more thanks for acknowledging my piece in your contest; much appreciated...:) hugggs

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 9:18:00 AM
    I can hear the sad music resonating in my ear as im reading each verse of this sad sailors' tale.. I love the sound of bagpipes though I know only how to play the guitar.

  1. Date: 10/14/2013 8:54:00 PM
    How can she not be swept away by the music one hears while reading this......?? I will hear it in my dream tonight! :) .... Ps........I must say how honored to be among the winners in your recent is such a compliment coming from such a talented poet as you. Thank you!