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Ricochet-- a collaboration with the Dashing David Williams

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Ricochet-- a collaboration with the Dashing David Williams

In a war long since forgotten,
the memories come raging black...stealthily,
                                                      in the silence

We envy their perfect aim,
a bull’s eye to the mind, assaulting the soul, making it yearn...Search 
amongst an impoverished scenery 
that’s seemingly devoid of reason...of heart, yet rich, so rich with blood.

Receding for miles on either side
lies hope—gasping, waning, dampening scorched wounds. 
...A sea of narrow lonely monuments
remain stoic. Waiting like dominoes, for peace to finally fall on them.

Again, thank you very much David for offering to help me by giving me these wonderful & inspiring lines to work on, you are so sweet and thoughtful to do so, :D. I don't think I could've come up with these lines right now if it weren't for yours...

David wrote the odd numbered lines, I the even numbered ones
 (ok umm, the 2nd line counts as one line up to "silence", hehehe)

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  1. Date: 9/27/2014 2:49:00 PM
    Amazing full of meaning. War is an ugly thing...I loved the bit about the monuments being like dominos....waiting for peace to fall on them...Well, better be careful as it is a collab. It's all great, but that spoke to my heart. Thanks for your visits, sweetie. Hope your daddy is doing better....Hugs!!!

  1. Date: 6/26/2012 9:36:00 PM
    I haven't read this collab between you and the ever-dashing David. The two of you did a smashing job, with a tough topic. I deleted my "Hair" poem because YOU commented on it! Ha ha! Silly, jellybean. Want to know the truth? I deleted it, because I was simply rehashing the same old stuff. You know wot I mean? I am just not feeling the Vomiticus hate right now.

  1. Date: 6/5/2012 9:29:00 AM
    hmmmm.....Somebody is a little jealous! : ) Excellent collaboration! The ending line is brilliant! Ruben.

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 3:56:00 PM
    Bravo to you both!!! David how did u you get to work with Nikko The Sweet?? Lol. So proud of you both. Maybe if I bribe Her with chocolate and gifts I can get a chance to create with this wonderful lady. Hugs morning till night luv. Michael the envious lol. Ps thank you both for reaching out to me on my Site.

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 12:13:00 PM
    No worries Missy, it was actually not a big deal, not seeing them.. Yep, we will catch up soon.. Sweet dreams *mwahugs* enjoy your Monday ;)

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 11:52:00 AM
    I was just about to comment here and then I got your comment on mine. Love this, I really do, good on David on getting you going with this :) nope I didn't get to see them!! :( but its all good :) thanks for reading my crazy write *mwahugs*

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 5:08:00 AM
    Well done David & nikko - good team! - Have a lovely Sunday nikko ! - oxox hug Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 4:05:00 AM
    just dropping by again to thank you for appreciating my poem for you, nikks... just glad i did something right down my alley--free verse!... ang saya!... it rained pero lumihis yata ang bagyo!... shine on and hugggs!..:)

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 1:47:00 AM
    The second line is your MONOKU line, right? hahah.. A cooler than cool collab...I find these to be so fun and inspiring...especially when the brain is in a major slump...Reading thru the winner's list in your judged it so well. I sure would not have wanted that job!...Great job on a superb contest...Love ya lady. Gwendolen

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 4:04:00 PM
    Yes, it was wonderful for David to come to your rescue. What a dashing dude he is!! Like i said to DAvid when he showed this on his page, this is GREAT work from you two. I think you should team up for more, sweetie!

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 2:47:00 PM
    panalao, nikkks... the muse is on a roll!. you can make your lines into a poem with very light adjustments.. haneps, na bighani naman ako!!.. splendid collab!!..:) more!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 12:15:00 PM
    WOW,Tremendous collab!!!

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 10:35:00 AM
    wonderful collab you two, harry

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 10:12:00 AM
    Hi David and Nikko, there are those veterans in my family, some alive, some gone now, who would mightily agree with your lovely poem! I, also agree. This is a wonderful idea, Nikko, to help with that writer's block. Hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 10:07:00 AM
    Nikko I think I prefer your version he he he...David

  1. Date: 6/1/2012 9:58:00 AM
    You did great work together, amazing what can be done when to minds get together, well done congrats to both of you, hugs vie